Recent historical event that effected more on our country is collapsed of republic government which affected on girl’s education, business and migration of people.
The most historical event which happened to our beloved country Afghanistan is collapsed of old government by Taliban regime. Which damaged all aspects of Afghanistan especially in girls education system as we all know women have the same right in a society as men have. But this right of women banned by Taliban government in our country. For example, education of girl’s student above class 7th has been banned all cross the country since 28 Aug 2021. Moreover the joining of ladies in government offices also not allowed which are against the law of humanity.
In addition of inhibit of girls school this new regime effected on people’s business too, when there is unsecure and no hope to live how a business man can take risk to invest money in this country. For instance, when the government collapsed some merchant they left the country to abroad. On the other hand, those remained in country their money blocked to the banks. This was the big issue all the small and big business has been stopped.
Beside all above effects about the collapsed of the republic government. All the educated and young generation left the country. Because there is no hope to live. For example, all the educated generation had hope to live for country and serve for people. But when the overall control of system be to an illiterate people there will not be any hope to stay to this country. As we know the educated and young generation is the strength of a country.
In conclusion collapsed of the republic government was the most historical event in our country Afghanistan which affected in all aspects especially in girl’s education, People income and immigration our citizen to our neighbor country.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, moreover, so, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 43.0788530466 35% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1414.0 1977.66487455 71% => OK
No of words: 289.0 407.700716846 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89273356401 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57331059522 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 212.727598566 65% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.480968858131 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 445.5 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.4155481712 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.375 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0625 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0625 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.357419491144 0.236089414692 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10839226645 0.076458572812 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101502313575 0.0737576698707 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23694168101 0.150856017488 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110561961559 0.0645574589148 171% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 86.8835125448 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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