Sample TOEFL essay: do you agree or disagree with the following statement? people should sometimes do things that they do not enjoy doing. use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

Doing something you dislike is sometimes beneficial

Everybody in his life has faced situations that he or she has to do something that he or she disliked. If you enjoy doing something it is easy for you to do it. But if you dislike something it is the time that things get harsh. Try to do an activity that you dislike. At least you will learn something new or you will raise your self-confidence about something that you have thought you may fail to do it. In this context, we will discuss it in details.

Most people do not have a problem when they do an activity that they like. They are self-motivated or maybe they have done it successfully in the past, so the self-confidence is present. For instance, you are asked to give a speech in front of a large number of audience, fortunately, if you have done it before or experienced such a situation it is easy to do it.

But what if you want to do something that you dislike? In most of the cases, lack of self-confidence is the major problem. So what to do? Putting yourself in such a situation will make you overcome the fear, in other words doing something you dislike will raise your self-confidence. As I gave an example in the previous paragraph putting yourself in the situation like speaking in front of a large number of audiences will make you overcome the fear and raise your self-esteem.

In conclusion, the force inside our mind that is preventing us from doing something or making us feel dislike about it should be stopped. As a matter of fact, doing something that we do not enjoy, practically will enhance our self-confidence and self-esteem and moreover help us to overcome our fears.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...text, we will discuss it in details. Most people do not have a problem when t...
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
... are asked to give a speech in front of a large number of audience, fortunately, if you have done...
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Suggestion:
...ch a situation it is easy to do it. But what if you want to do something tha...
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...the situation like speaking in front of a large number of audiences will make you overcome the fe...
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Suggestion:
...moreover help us to overcome our fears.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, moreover, so, as to, at least, for instance, in conclusion, as a matter of fact, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1372.0 1977.66487455 69% => OK
No of words: 298.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60402684564 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91025315783 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 212.727598566 63% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.453020134228 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 432.0 618.680645161 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.5343570032 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.75 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.625 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8125 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2869099153 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128669762785 0.076458572812 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0818948404163 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195774759166 0.150856017488 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0345878781557 0.0645574589148 54% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.7 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 86.8835125448 47% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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