Nowadays, many students are doing part-time job in order to pay for their high tuition fees. Also, having a part-time job could help students to examine their ability and knowledge and gain experience in their field of studies. While some people claim students having a part-time job is absolutely beneficial, I disagree with this notion because students primarily has to focus on their studies. In addition, naive students who are young are exposed to risk of imposture and abuse.
To begin with, doing a part-time job may disturb student's studies. Some people claim that through part-time job, students could experience their specific field of studies and gain work experience. Also, in order to afford the high tuition fee of universities, students have to earn money through part-time jobs. For example, if a student is studying food tech and hospitality in school, they could benefit through working in a restaurant or a kitchen while making money. However, many students with a short-sighted view overlook the fact that student's priority is to study. Doing a part- time job takes away student's precious time. Also, they easily get tired and stress both physically and mentally due to the hard work in their job and school. In addition, there are many alternative methods to earn money such as getting a student's loan. Consequently, the disadvantage of students doing a part-time job outweighs the advantages in terms of studying.
In addition, students are more susceptible to abuse and harassment in work. Since they're young and inexperienced, students are more likely to be belittled and harassed. For example, when I did part-time job in a restaurant, seniors bullied me whenever I made a mistake just because I was young. Discrimination could also happen. Many business owners neglect part-time workers because they think they'll leave work eventually. Also, unpaid wage is a serious issue in many countries. This is because many students are unaware of laws or deal with these situations, employers often leave part-time worker's wage unpaid. Therefore, student doing part-time job could expose them into serious situations.
In conclusion, I think students getting a part-time work is not a good idea. Students could earn money from other ways for their high educational fees, and also it could disturb their studies. In addition, students are easily exposed to the risk of harassment in workplace.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 544, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...ort-sighted view overlook the fact that students priority is to study. Doing a part- tim...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the advantages in terms of studying. In addition, students are more susceptib...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: they're
... to abuse and harassment in work. Since theyre young and inexperienced, students are m...
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Suggestion: they'll
...ct part-time workers because they think theyll leave work eventually. Also, unpaid wag...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, however, if, look, may, so, therefore, while, as to, for example, i think, in addition, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2036.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 388.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24742268041 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7696437988 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489690721649 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 617.4 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.7283390678 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.8333333333 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1666666667 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.04166666667 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 16.0 3.85842293907 415% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.519021780498 0.236089414692 220% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.199138723122 0.076458572812 260% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.166535266784 0.0737576698707 226% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.37072106472 0.150856017488 246% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.117642179046 0.0645574589148 182% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.87 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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