The advancements in computer science are changing our everyday lifestyle, one such advancement being the development of cyber education systems. Nowadays, computers are widely used in classrooms to help students find information and communicate with others. However, as technology develops in the near future students will able to listen to classes online at home instead of going to school sounds plausible. While some people prefer these change of education, however I believe that students could learn more by attending and studying at traditional schools. This is because online education lacks interactions between students and the teacher. Also, when using the computer, students are not likely to concentrate in studying but rather do other things as well.
First of all, at traditional classes, students could learn more by interacting with friends and teachers.Online education lacks communication. At school, whenever you have a question, you are able to freely ask the teacher. However, if students watch video lessons at home instead of attending to classes, they will not gain any additional knowledge other than the information they passively receive. In retrospect, when our economy teacher was sick, he posted up videos online for us to study. But, whenever I had a question about a point I do not understand or argue the pros and cons about a specific economical phenomenon, I could not fulfill my curiosity. Also, students can learn new ideas and opinions from discussing with other friends. By receiving other people's perspective, students could extend their own ideas furthermore. Also, through communicating with other students, students enhance their speaking skills and learn how to accept other people. But, online education preclude these benefits. Therefore, to promote learning, I think studying at traditional schools is a better choice.
In addition, using computers disturb students learning. When using electronic devices, students easily fall into the temptations of games and online surfing. Computers are convenient and sometimes beneficial for learning. Students could easily search up information on the internet or watch educational videos. However, there are certain drawbacks as well. Students are not likely to concentrate when they do other things while studying online. For example, our school permits students using laptops and tablet computers to search information and take notes during classes. However, many of them secretly play games or do online surfing on their laptops instead of concentrating to their lessons. Therefore, I prefer traditional classes compared to online education.
Studying online is definitely convenient for both students and teachers. Students do not have to go to school but rather study comfortably at home. However, I prefer traditional schools. Firstly, I could learn more by discussing and asking question. Also, using computers often disturbs learning.
- TPO-29 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To improve the quality of education, universities should spend money on salaries university professors. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
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- TPO-31- Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the pastUse specific reasons and examples to 85
- In the future, students may have the choice of studying at home by using technology such as computers or television or of studying at traditional schools. Which would you prefer? Use reasons and specific details to explain your choice. 92
- TPO-13 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 78
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 106, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Online
...y interacting with friends and teachers.Online education lacks communication. At schoo...
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Line 5, column 637, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...secretly play games or do online surfing on their laptops instead of concentratin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, well, while, for example, i think, in addition, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2497.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 444.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.62387387387 4.8611393121 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89642354239 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515765765766 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 763.2 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.4862937915 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.2333333333 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.26666666667 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280805754662 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0814049639938 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0671467377045 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214127305374 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0624312189852 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 58.1214874552 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.72 10.9000537634 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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