The reading and the lecture are both about the installation of a device called Turtle Excluder Device (TED) that prevents the loss of any other sea animals during the process of catching shrimps. The author of the article is of the opinion that the installation of such device on boats has been a fruitful solution. The lecturer completely challenges the claims made by the author. She is of the opinion that such installation devices even if may seem productive are far away from being perfect.
Firstly, the writer states that the TED has mechanical barriers which prevent the trapping of any organism greater than 10 cm. Such barriers are effective since sea turtles will not pass through these barriers and can be used only for catching shrimps. However, this specific argument is challenged by the lecturer. She states that even though these barriers can prevent the passage of sea turtles, they can work only for particular sizes. Additionally, she also mentions that such obstructions are not very productive since this still leads to death of mid-sized turtles which are comparatively smaller in size.
Secondly, the author mentions that to avoid any further losses, the installation of TED has been made mandatory. On top of that, organizations for installation and regular maintenance have been established for monitoring the usage of the device. However, the lecturer completely rebuts this by pointing out that it is impossible for any organization to constantly monitor its usage. She elaborates on this by saying that due to the mechanical restriction of the barrier, shrimps can escape the trap which leads to loss and hence usage of the device has not been preferred by the people and there are no means to ensure that the device has been installed all the time or on a temporary basis.
Finally, the author says that the import and selling of shrimps have been restricted only to certified users of TED boats. Such restrictions enforce the users to install the device. In contrast, the lecturer argues that the import can still continue with the possession of fake documents and certificates. She also points out that possessing fake certificates in the vessel is not a daunting task and hence is not an effective solution to cease the import. Consequently, the author still believes that the solution employed in the article is not completely efficient.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 315, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... on boats has been a fruitful solution. The lecturer completely challenges the clai...
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Line 3, column 597, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: smaller
...d-sized turtles which are comparatively smaller in size. Secondly, the author mentions that ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, in contrast, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1989.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 392.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07397959184 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77121962596 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479591836735 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 618.3 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 10.0 3.08781362007 324% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.3765165817 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.5 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7777777778 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.27777777778 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0560861215546 0.236089414692 24% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0164186221142 0.076458572812 21% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0333254061254 0.0737576698707 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0346559840615 0.150856017488 23% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0125681612699 0.0645574589148 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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