Nowadays, it is radically significant to have a well desired lifestyle. By the top of my head, I can say that making a fabulous lifestyle needs a very high level of cognition which is achievable through learning. Whenever a student wants to learn better he/she should spend more money, so that student needs to earn more money. Even though parents usually pay their children which is a way of earning money, but working and making money has its own and unbelievable benefits. Consequently, I say I agree with having a part-job while studying.
First and for most, it is obvious that money is so valuable and everybody knows it, but the people who are working and making money know it better. Maybe asking parents for money is a way for a student, but I think not a good way because somebody doing it does not realize the real value of money. When somebody doesn’t pay attention to money’s worth, that person never thinks how and where to use it. So, I say in order to not waste our money we should basically know its value. Finally, work hard to know how valuable the money is.
Second, I think almost everyone wants to be independent in any aspect of life. I think, when a student is using his/her parents’ money, they are feeling somehow dependent. What I can realize is that that means we cannot go ahead without somebody’s help. So, I think such feelings make the students worry and disappointed till they cannot learn correctly. In the same cases, I would prefer to work and make money rather to ask my parents.
The third and final thing which is highly significant, I can easily claim that working in a position needs experiences. Apparently in most countries like my country we have to be experienced to get a good job. It is an opportunity for a student who has a part-time job in addition of studying. He/she can experience and learn how to work. Eventually, in the future he/she can mention their work experience in their job application forms as a strength.
As a result, I think having a part-time job makes a student more brilliant and active. it keeps the student alarm and smart because, the student is not worry about money as a necessary source for studying. Finally, I want to end my essay by saying “let the students to work if you want them to make a better future”.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 214, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n which is achievable through learning. Whenever a student wants to learn better...
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Line 1, column 250, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...ng. Whenever a student wants to learn better he/she should spend more money, so that...
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Line 3, column 248, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'somebody' must be used with a third-person verb: 'does'.
Suggestion: does
...I think not a good way because somebody doing it does not realize the real value of m...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ir job application forms as a strength. As a result, I think having a part-time ...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...es a student more brilliant and active. it keeps the student alarm and smart becau...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, consequently, finally, first, if, may, second, so, third, well, while, i think, in addition, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1921.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 411.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67396593674 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71330231637 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513381995134 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 594.0 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.117063771 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 83.5217391304 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8695652174 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.26086956522 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0936087748405 0.236089414692 40% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0335988231071 0.076458572812 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0397095467599 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0587988501005 0.150856017488 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0121618064353 0.0645574589148 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.51 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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