In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a good idea? Support your opinion by using specific reasons and details.
Students are a vital part of every community throughout the world. Their skills and knowledge after university play an enormously high role in the future prosperity and outcome, not only for their careers, but also for the domestic economy and well-being of others. There are different opinions whether students should work or not. However, in my opinion, I strongly believe that students should work while they are studying, for reasons which I will explain in the following essay.
First of all, by working from an early age a person is able to accumulate more knowledge and experience about a specific field. One of the biggest flaws about the way university and school system works, at least in most majors, is the lack of opportunities that it offers for students to get their hands dirty with life problems. That being the case, when students graduate, they are still not ready to do a job with high responsibility. Nonetheless, this situation has its good side, because that small group of students who work and their resume is filled with different job experiences, are in a big advantage compared to their peers with no such experience. For example, in my country it is very hard to find a job even if you have graduated top of the class. Last year, my brother and his friends graduated with a degree in computer science. But only he was able to find a job as a junior software developer. The distinguishing factor was that he had worked a couple of part time jobs and doing different types of internships, while his friends were focused solely on the academic aspect of their field. And as it turned out he was the one who made the right decision. This is only one of many examples that proves the worthiness of job experience.
Secondly, having a job from a young age, is one of the best ways to improve social skills which are of great importance in having a successful career. It is a known fact that confidence, emotional intelligence and communication skills, also known as soft skills, are just as valuable as any other knowledge related to a specific subject. Therefore, by spending time and working in a stressful environment with complete strangers is, probably, the best way to learn how to interact and communicate. My own experience is a compelling example of this. Before my twentieth birthday, which corresponds with my first job, my social anxiety was pretty bad. This used to happen every time I spent time in an unfamiliar environment. However, luckily for me, in my second year at college, one of my professors offered me a job at a big financial institution. The first week was very hard, but then the situation kept improving and my social skills were much better after the first month. Moreover, at the end of semester when I went back home for summer holidays, my family was stunned by how much I had changed in such short time. I can easily say that this experience has changed my life for better in an unbelievable fashion.
In conclusion, I acknowledge the fact that there might be different ideas or opinions on this issue. Nevertheless, having a job from a young age is better from my perspective because you learn more about your future career and you improve social skills.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: part-time
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Message: Consider replacing "in an unbelievable fashion" with adverb for "unbelievable"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...perience has changed my life for better in an unbelievable fashion. In conclusion, I acknowledge the fa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, well, while, at least, for example, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2665.0 1977.66487455 135% => OK
No of words: 559.0 407.700716846 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76744186047 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86242540663 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74526920709 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 281.0 212.727598566 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502683363148 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 837.0 618.680645161 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.8579028874 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.5 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.38461538462 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159303360698 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0456574390813 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0428160080489 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107786074538 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0439760649957 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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