Advent of smart phones brought many agrees and disagrees to upbringing children methods. Some psychologists posit that new mobile devices has negative effects on young persons while the others claim that this smart apparatus is necessary. I think this type of cell phone should be forbidden for children.
First, life span has some stages which contributes with some activities relating to a particular stage. In childhood stage kids should experience energetic entertainments and physical games in order to being active however smart tools make anything virtual and result in dormant lifestyle for children. For example a kid can play football on mobile without any movement instead of socialize with his friends or burn calories and this would not help a positive grown up process.
In other point, this new phones which can easily access internet environment has perilous affect by making teenagers familiar with many adult issues. This is like ashes under fire for civilized countries in further years that current kids know anything as their parents in many subjects including sexuality or fraud while this is not recommended by any psychologist as a suitable phenomenon.
Third, young people should focus on their school program to learn many fundamental lessons in several fields which it requires concentration for them. While many researchers prove that modern cells is destructive to have full attention that it means this online technology is in contradiction with our educational systems. However our kids have been banned from bringing their mobile to school but this is undisputed that they would not pay attention to their teachers because their mind is in other atmosphere which called web.
In conclusion, wireless phones with ability to surf internet have many undesired outcomes to our developed countries but children’s interest to this invention is inevitable and we should control in a best way plan.
- TPO 29 90
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 91, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
...ccess internet environment has perilous affect by making teenagers familiar with many adu...
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Line 5, column 152, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ich it requires concentration for them. While many researchers prove that modern cell...
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Line 5, column 324, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...radiction with our educational systems. However our kids have been banned from bringing...
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Line 7, column 204, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
... is inevitable and we should control in a best way plan.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, so, third, while, for example, i think, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1634.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 304.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.375 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74766962455 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.631578947368 0.524837075471 120% => OK
syllable_count: 496.8 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.334415573 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.166666667 100.406767564 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3333333333 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256832131403 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100908611618 0.076458572812 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0521848700639 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143276300651 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0625773301755 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 11.7677419355 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.22 10.9000537634 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.71 8.01818996416 121% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.