Childhood is the most crucial period of a person's life. It is the time for a person to familiarize oneself with new things, get social with people, prepare himself for future and get proper education. Sometimes, parents tend to celebrate their kids success in school by offering them money. Many people might support the idea saying that it would motivate a kid to perform well and consequently it would help them to have a prosperous life. However, I personally strongly dislike this idea and some reasons will be provided in the following paragraphs to verify my judgement.
First and foremost, the main rationale I disagree with the idea of offering money for good result in school is that this kind of monetary token might make a child greedy. It is a known fact that children always learn from their parents. Therefore, if they find that their parents measure every success with money, it would certainly make their mindset likewise and when they grow up they would also consider economical value of every aspect of life. Hence, I think it is better to appreciate a child for his success and make the kid feel that his success makes the parents happy. To encourage the kid, parents might arrange a party or plan a tour or even cook special dish and celebrate the success.
Second issue that comes to my mind is that children might take tremendous pressure to achieve good result in order to earn money. As a consequence, it might cause harmful effect on physical and mental health of a child. Moreover, this kind of monetary prizes might lead a child to follow unethical ways to confirm good result in exams. Also, it would create unncessary competition in learning environment and a child might tend to look for shortcut ways to get higher grade.
Finally, I personally believe that achieving good result in school should not be the only goal of a child. Parents should motivate their kid to engage into another activities like painting, reading books, playing games and other extra-curricular activities. Offering money only for educational success might lead a child unsocial and he would keep himself into home to study day and night. In our childhood, most of us manage our time to play, to gossip and other activities which gave us much wonderful experience and made our childhood enjoyable.
To sum up, it is fairly safe to draw the conclusion that parents should encourage their kids achievement in school, but they should not always offer money for that and it would not be wise to engage kids only in study.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 43, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...ildhood is the most crucial period of a persons life. It is the time for a person to fa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, hence, however, if, likewise, look, moreover, second, so, therefore, well, i think, kind of, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2101.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 434.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84101382488 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52104165005 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516129032258 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 647.1 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.0254295843 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.578947368 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8421052632 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.52631578947 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281286587383 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0836253553311 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0659400565139 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159350731488 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0518664994733 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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