Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?
Nobody can overlook the fact that in the progressive and sophisticated world, where we live encouragement plays a considerable role in leading people toward success. There are some parents that apply this strategy when their juveniles acquire high scores in schools. As far as I am concerned, this idea can have some benefits that are elaborated hereupon:
To begin with, giving money to children as a reward creates an impetus for kids to do better in future situations. In other words, should kids be aware of positive upcoming reactions of their parents, they will try to do their best to achieve that positive feedback, and do not make their parents disappointed. For instance, when I was a child, about 10 years old, I was a lazy girl in school, and I did not use to pay enough attention to my schoolwork, therefore, I was not able to obtain high enough grades. One day, my father promised if I reached a suitable score in my maths exam, he would give me a satisfactory amount of money. As a result, I tried immensely and achieved that prize. And from that day, I changed my mind and became a diligent student. Consequently, giving a prize can cause the kids` motivation.
Furthermore, by offering money to children, they become familiar with financial concepts and it can help them to manage and deal with their monetary issues in future life. In other words, when children experience the pleasure of having money and independency, it encourages them to save money and prepare their desired goods by their own and just rely on themselves in more condition that it can raise their self-confidence, too. For example, my father used to give me money as a result of my convincing performance in my exams so I enjoyed the pleasure of being financially independent. Consequently, I saved my money to can buy a bicycle for myself and when I did that it leads to a great feeling about my potential abilities. These days I am able to cope with my financial issue due to those experiences. As a result, giving money to children can broaden their horizons about money matters.
Finally, according to the aforementioned reasons giving money to children as a reward for their good grade has a great effect because it not only teaches them to manage their financial issues but also makes them avid to be a hard worker.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 409, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...as a lazy girl in school, and I did not use to pay enough attention to my schoolwor...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, furthermore, if, look, so, therefore, for example, for instance, as a result, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1918.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 403.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75930521092 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84663515609 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543424317618 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 618.3 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.3256317658 48.9658058833 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.875 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1875 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.8125 5.45110844103 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251396740362 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0757367799128 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0660942557665 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14841175533 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00763614248826 0.0645574589148 12% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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