Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?
Whether parents should give a prize to their children whenever they carry out a task perfectly is among the most controversial subjects, which often provoke many discussions. Some people keep endorsing the claim that it’s a good idea to offer their student offspring money for their good grades whereas others dismiss this idea. Personally, I have a mixed opinion in this regard and believe that it can provides both advantages and disadvantages simultaneously. In what follows, I will thoroughly elucidate what rationales my view point is based on.
The first and foremost reason is pertinent to one of the advantages of suggesting money to children. From a general perspective, offering prize to immature children for their good jobs such as good grades can encourage them and, hence, motivate them to try to repeat that task. Psychologically, individual, regardless of their age, sense a feel of proud and consent whenever they are praised for their good task. Therefore, under-aged kids will also be instigated to study more by these offers which bring about satisfying senses for them. Take my own experience as a compelling example. When I was student, my father would give money as a financial prize to me if I could pass a very important exam which allowed me to enter an excellent school. Although studying for such a competing and hard exam was arduous for me, but his tempting offer was a great incentive for me which pushed me forward studying. Honestly, hardly I can say that my studying was not due to that offer.
The second pivotal vindicating point I mention is regarding to the disadvantages of such offers to children. In contrast, these financial offers can relatively have adverse impact on children since they forget the main goal of studying and achieving good grades which is learning. After a while, by attaining money after each good grade over and over, they will try for the money itself not for the knowledge. As a result, the objective of everything will gradually fade away for them and money become the mere thing that they endeavor for. Returning to my own aforementioned experience, money had become my purpose and I was just trying in order to get that money, neither the good grade nor that excellent school was of high significance for me.
To put in a nutshell, parents should be very careful about prize they offer to their offspring, especially the immature and younger ones. Conclusively, financial offers can be an impressive incentive for children to encourage them to study and achieve excellent grads. However, such suggestions can also distort the children from the main aim of studying and getting good grade, which is learning rather than attaining money.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 404, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'provide'
Suggestion: provide
... in this regard and believe that it can provides both advantages and disadvantages simul...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, honestly, however, if, regarding, second, so, therefore, whereas, while, in contrast, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2266.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 451.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0243902439 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78058682107 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529933481153 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 699.3 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.3125649078 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.3 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.55 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.55 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.37343778527 0.236089414692 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106815769379 0.076458572812 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0747386680881 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.238492573329 0.150856017488 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0451313000706 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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