Without any shadow of doubt, in today's world, money is considered as the most valuable present. Keeping this fact in mind, some parents are of the opinion that rewarding their children with money for their high grades is an excellent idea. Regarding this issue, I am personally positive about giving children money as a gift for their doing well in school. I feel this way for a couple of reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that it can function as an incentive for the children to study further. By giving money for good outcome, parents motivate their children, and the children figure out that as long as they get high marks, they will receive awards. Therefore, they raise their effort to get even more of that. As an example, two years ago, my cousin, Vala, started the elementary school, and his parents decided to give cash as a gift for each of his good marks. Once Vala understood that he may receive a reward for each of his high grades, he attempted to get more of that by bringing more nice results to his parents. As you can see, a reward can easily stimulate children to study more.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that it can teach them budget management. When children find out that they can purchase some things with this valuable reward, they start to learn how to manage it to be able to get what they want by that. Moreover, in the future they will be less likely to encounter financial issues. To illustrate, again my cousin, Vala, saved all the money he received from his parents last year. He was unsure about what to do with that money, and at the end of the educational year, he bought a toy car for himself; afew months later he realized that he wanted a game console more than that. Hence, he decide to study more seriously the next year to be able to buy that console. Consequently, now he knows how to manage his money to achieve his goals.
Taking all above-mentioned arguments into consideration, it can be concluded that giving rewards, especially cash rewards for children's well doing, is a very beneficial idea for parents; because of the fact that, not only it increases their motivation to study more, but also they learn how to manage money from early ages.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, therefore, well, i feel
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1872.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59950859951 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40741358701 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530712530713 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 583.2 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.1680795073 48.9658058833 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.0 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6111111111 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28950303076 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0967502183911 0.076458572812 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0797641107263 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192630498899 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0872360965701 0.0645574589148 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.7 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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