Some parents offer their school age children money for each high grade mark they get in school Do you think this is a good idea Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

Nowadays, many students study hard for many reasons. For example, to achieve dreams, to want to get a compliment for others and to get a prize for parents.Therefore, I agree that parents offer their school age children money for each high grade mark. From now, I will tell you some reasons to support my opinion.

First, the prize can motivate children. Many students think studying is so boring, so many do not want to study. Accordingly, it can stimulate them to study hard or endure to study. Actually, I hated math when I was young, at that time my mom said” if you get a 100 points, I will give you 100 RMB”. So I did my best and endured it. In the end I got 100 points in math. This is why I think the rewards strength is so big.

Second, if children receive rewards from an early age, they can learn directly that if they work hard, there will be rewards. Therefore they will do their best in what they do in the future, and whatever they do, it can be their strength.

Like this, the reward can help students study more. It can not only motivate students, but also can give a moral to them. As a result, I think the rewards are a good way for students to study.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, actually, also, but, first, if, second, so, therefore, for example, i think, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 52.1666666667 35% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 962.0 1977.66487455 49% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 223.0 407.700716846 55% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.31390134529 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86434787811 4.48103885553 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38449515177 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 126.0 212.727598566 59% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.565022421525 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 284.4 618.680645161 46% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.7916918208 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 64.1333333333 100.406767564 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8666666667 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.73333333333 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293244374054 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.077563951176 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0932932248923 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168905924112 0.150856017488 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.120967177196 0.0645574589148 187% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.3 11.7677419355 54% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 82.65 58.1214874552 142% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.2 10.1575268817 51% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 7.13 10.9000537634 65% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.74 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 86.8835125448 39% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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