Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that parents should to give to their clidren for a good mark in the school or another childern tasks. Contrary to this popular beliefs there are still those who argue that offerig money to childern led to encourage them fro more practic and it is work as a motivation power for them. I, to a great extent disagree with this idea that giving money to childern for high grade is a true way for childern encourage and education.
Firsta dn foremost, offering money to childern have really negative effect on their behavior and believes. Because they should be know that they study in the school for increasing their knowledge and learning new things. But giving money to them for a good grade led to they study bfor getting money. For example, I have little cozin and he has this habit to take money for everythings from his parents. But surely, this bad habit shape in his mind because of his parents incorrect decision. He does not clean his room or does his homework without getting money from his parent. And this condition make big concern for his parent.
On onother significant fact that should be taken into the consideration is that offering money for works that these are common task of children led to they become inresponsible person in their future life. Cildren should be learn that they should be do their task regularly, because this task is a parte of their life. Thus, offering money not only become a harmful habit for them but led to children have several problem about social abilities and personality and a lot of this kind of children will be indipendent person in adult.
Finally, yet importantly, after some time when getting money from parents bebome very usual for the children. This money have not any attraction for them and lost its positive effect on students study. And because they do not learn that study for the benefites of education, these children faced with drop in their marks. And maybe a lot of them lost schools in the high school or sooner.
On the basis of reasons that mentioned above, I am convinced that parent should not offer money to their children because of good grade. because, its harmful effect is very higher that its benefites.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 255, Rule ID: FOR_FRO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'for'?
Suggestion: for
...money to childern led to encourage them fro more practic and it is work as a motiva...
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Line 3, column 131, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'known'?
Suggestion: known
...or and believes. Because they should be know that they study in the school for incre...
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Line 5, column 225, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'learned', 'learnt'?
Suggestion: learned; learnt
...in their future life. Cildren should be learn that they should be do their task regul...
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Message: Did you mean 'done'?
Suggestion: done
...ren should be learn that they should be do their task regularly, because this task...
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Suggestion:
...rmful habit for them but led to children have several problem about social abilit...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun problem seems to be countable; consider using: 'several problems'.
Suggestion: several problems
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Suggestion: Because
...o their children because of good grade. because, its harmful effect is very higher that...
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Message: “because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...o their children because of good grade. because, its harmful effect is very higher that...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, may, really, so, still, thus, for example, kind of, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1844.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76485788114 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34950087701 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.483204134367 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 566.1 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.0614026356 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.0526315789 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3684210526 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.94736842105 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.419603953479 0.236089414692 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138141109388 0.076458572812 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.064835009218 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.237727210408 0.150856017488 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0558618190601 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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