Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school.Do you think this is a good idea?Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school.
Do you think this is a good idea?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Submitted by Timae05 on Fri, 01/25/2019 - 15:54

Children are important members of our society, they are the future of the World, and with proper guidance they can be of great help to our starving society. Like plants, they need nourishment in able for them to grow very well, just like their parent's good words as their source of nourishment. Generally speaking, I believe that it is not necessary for parents to give their children money as a reward if they get high grades in school.

First, it is beneficial to consider the importance of providing your child, kind words of appreciation instead of giving them money. Most children are not really knowledgable about the importance of money and the disadvantages it will give. For me, it is better for them to receive kind words of appreciation because they will understand it more. When I was in my elementary, every time I get good grades, my parents will reward me with money and every Sundays I get to spend my reward and buy toys or anything I want, but to me it is something that is not valuable to me, it is just something I am getting used to. On the other hand, I can see my classmate and her parents' relationship is so different, she always tells me how she felt the love of her parents because every time she gets good grades they always appreciate her, I felt jealous of her and I thought I want it too.

In addition to the importance of providing kind words of appreciation. I believe that is beneficial for a child to not encounter anything about money not until they are young adults, like when they are able to work and provide for their own needs. The reasons for this is that, they will not know the importance of money and they won't possibly work hard in the future to provide for themselves, because, they will think that their parents are rich and has a lot of money. Same situation happened to my classmate before, when we were students her parents always give her money if she gets good grades and as a result she thought that she doesn't need to work when she gets old because they are rich, which she is wrong, they live a very modest way and there is no way she can just sit and ask for money from her parents in able for her to sustain her life in the near future.

Finally, and I think the most important reasons of all, I believe that money is the root of all evil, this means that because of money there will be many possible problems that will occur. An example of this is that because my parents reward my brother with money when we were younger if he gets good grades, he only study because of money not for the future. As a result, he didn't finish his college because my parents stopped giving him money when he reached college and because of that his future was jeopardized.

By way of conclusion, according to the arguments stated above, I am of the opinion that in most cases it is more important that parents should not give their children money as a reward in getting good grades at school.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 638, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...es and as a result she thought that she doesnt need to work when she gets old because ...
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Line 7, column 318, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'studies'.
Suggestion: studies
...younger if he gets good grades, he only study because of money not for the future. As...
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Line 7, column 377, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...ney not for the future. As a result, he didnt finish his college because my parents s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, really, so, well, i think, in addition, as a result, in most cases, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 105.0 43.0788530466 244% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2401.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 543.0 407.700716846 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.42173112339 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82725184711 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3914548281 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.394106813996 0.524837075471 75% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 747.9 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.1344086022 164% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.735931203 48.9658058833 159% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.0625 100.406767564 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.9375 20.6045352989 165% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.875 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28323144873 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112560744787 0.076458572812 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0802768701029 0.0737576698707 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185384415502 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0464569940223 0.0645574589148 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.9 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.95 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.08 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.0537634409 151% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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