The essential question of the prompt is whether should learn about life by listening to familiy and friend advice or by personal life experience. Some people, if asked, would say that families and friends are the best advisors for them. Others believe that the question is double-edged as there are many factors involve. In my views, people should use both family advice and personal life experience in order to develop best idea about life. The basis for my views is as the follow.
Families and friend are the one's who lives with us and near to us. Their have a great influence in our life and our future. Without family and friends advice, people feel lost. Admittedly, family and friends have enough experience to help their beloved future and career. For example, when I graduated from high school, I had difficulties choose which major I wont to join at college. I was so desprit to the point that I decided to skip one year to figuer out what I wanted to do. However, my parents advice me to join pharmacy school since they knew that there are a shortage in pharmacists job in the market. My dad explains to me that after I graduate, I will find a job much easier than who is graduated form other fileds. My parents also offered me to join their freind pharmcy in order to develop a better idea about the career. Because their advice, I'm currently one of the successful pharmacists in my career.
Despite their contribution in my future, my family significantly healp me invest my money more efficiently. Since I came from a business family, my parents help me augment my business. For instance, my parents advice me to advertise for the pharmacy products online. They also advice me to offer home delivery to my customers. If I turn my face away from their advice, my business would never grow.
Finally, Of course there are some life experiences that families and friends can not help you with it. take physical experience like riding bike or driving as an example. If you did not ride the bike by you self, you never learn how to ride it. Even though there are some bad consequances from riding the bike for the frist time, this the only way people gain riding skills.
As a conclusion, we should not depend on one source of advice to learn the complete picture of life. Whether it is family advice or physical skills, People should optain their knowledge and skills from multiple sources.
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Essay evaluation report
is whether should learn about life
is whether people should learn about life
there are many factors involve
there are many factors involved
are the one's who lives with us
are the ones who live with us
Sentence: Even though there are some bad consequances from riding the bike for the frist time, this the only way people gain riding skills.
Description: The tag a determiner/pronoun, singular is not usually followed by the
Suggestion: Refer to this and the
Sentence: The essential question of the prompt is whether should learn about life by listening to familiy and friend advice or by personal life experience.
Error: familiy Suggestion: family
Sentence: I was so desprit to the point that I decided to skip one year to figuer out what I wanted to do.
Error: desprit Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: figuer Suggestion: figure
Sentence: My dad explains to me that after I graduate, I will find a job much easier than who is graduated form other fileds.
Error: fileds Suggestion: filed
Sentence: My parents also offered me to join their freind pharmcy in order to develop a better idea about the career.
Error: pharmcy Suggestion: pharmacy
Error: freind Suggestion: friend
Sentence: Despite their contribution in my future, my family significantly healp me invest my money more efficiently.
Error: healp Suggestion: help
Sentence: Even though there are some bad consequances from riding the bike for the frist time, this the only way people gain riding skills.
Error: frist Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: consequances Suggestion: consequences
Sentence: Whether it is family advice or physical skills, People should optain their knowledge and skills from multiple sources.
Error: optain Suggestion: obtain
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 10 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 10 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 426 350
No. of Characters: 1928 1500
No. of Different Words: 214 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.543 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.526 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.369 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 141 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 81 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 48 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 25 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.04 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.142 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.4 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.309 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.512 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.149 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 413, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'develop the best'.
Suggestion: develop the best
...nd personal life experience in order to develop best idea about life. The basis for my views...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 472, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...bout life. The basis for my views is as the follow. Families and friend are the ones wh...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 79, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ives with us and near to us. Their have a great influence in our life and our fu...
^^
Line 3, column 862, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...about the career. Because their advice, Im currently one of the successful pharmac...
^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'for example', 'for instance', 'of course', 'in my view']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.240425531915 0.229887763892 105% => OK
Verbs: 0.153191489362 0.158761421928 96% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0553191489362 0.0866891130778 64% => OK
Adverbs: 0.036170212766 0.046263068375 78% => OK
Pronouns: 0.117021276596 0.0685040099705 171% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.123404255319 0.118717715034 104% => OK
Participles: 0.0148936170213 0.0351676179071 42% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.450545028 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0382978723404 0.0309702414327 124% => OK
Particles: 0.00212765957447 0.00188951952338 113% => OK
Determiners: 0.0617021276596 0.0887237588012 70% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0170212765957 0.0209618222197 81% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0148936170213 0.0139019557991 107% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2411.0 2387.08602151 101% => OK
No of words: 425.0 408.028673835 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.67294117647 5.86048508987 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.48200974243 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.336470588235 0.338922669872 99% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.230588235294 0.251872472559 92% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.129411764706 0.174417080927 74% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0658823529412 0.112833075102 58% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.450545028 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505882352941 0.524397521467 96% => OK
Word variations: 56.7219266304 59.2087087015 96% => OK
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6684587814 126% => OK
Sentence length: 16.3461538462 20.5533526081 80% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.1916299472 48.84282405 54% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.7307692308 120.699889404 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3461538462 20.5533526081 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.384615384615 0.644075263715 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.54480286738 72% => OK
Readability: 39.4049773756 45.7405998639 86% => OK
Elegance: 1.23611111111 1.45489161554 85% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.415009358448 0.300154397459 138% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.089812504238 0.103427244359 87% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0654147672154 0.0752933317313 87% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.470209946386 0.497263757937 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.118653396591 0.151897553556 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124321112572 0.114077575197 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0858019877058 0.0781384742642 110% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.240245005879 0.336927656856 71% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.130698476555 0.067059652881 195% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.258145112448 0.210909579961 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.143559907236 0.0618886996521 232% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8870967742 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.91756272401 183% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 15.0 8.42114695341 178% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 7.0 2.75985663082 254% => OK
Total topic words: 23.0 13.6433691756 169% => OK
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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