Money is essential to live a good life, as it takes care of your needs and your health, and gives freedom to do other things. But, focusing only on making money would not be a good use of one's life, in my opinion. Money does solve lots of problem, but not all. While lack of money can make anyone's life miserable, surplus of the same cannot guarantee happiness.
Some people are passionate about making a good deal of money, wealth creation is their topmost priority. While it is good to focus on making money, one should also try to relax in life, this does not mean that making money should not be a goal, it should be but at the same time other aspects of life should be taken care of. Spending time with friends and family, going on vacations with them should not be neglected in pursuit of money. In my opinion, if I am making a lot of money but not able to spend time with my family, then who do I am making that money for? Also, essence of money can be realised best when you have someone around you to realise that.
These days, many people neglect their health as well in effort to earn huge chunk of money. We should realise that Health should be the primary goal, as they say Health is wealth. We will be able to do other things only if we are healthy. Recently, a well known billionaire died in my country at an early age because of bad health, having billions in bank account cannot bring that person back for his family.
So, I think every once in a while we should take a pause and think, what are most important things in life, and whatever we are doing, who we are doing it for. In conclusion, I would like to say having a relaxed life with decent amount of money is better.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 189, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...making money would not be a good use of ones life, in my opinion. Money does solve l...
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Line 1, column 232, Rule ID: LOTS_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun problem seems to be countable; consider using: 'lots of problems'.
Suggestion: lots of problems
...s life, in my opinion. Money does solve lots of problem, but not all. While lack of money can m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, then, well, while, i think, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1378.0 1977.66487455 70% => OK
No of words: 323.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.26625386997 4.8611393121 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.08269178619 2.67179642975 78% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526315789474 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 433.8 618.680645161 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.7781875882 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.8666666667 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5333333333 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287892805909 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0945471711004 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0688540624901 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175719002591 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0851357727041 0.0645574589148 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.54 58.1214874552 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.49 10.9000537634 69% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.93 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 86.8835125448 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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