Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their own health. Others , however, believe that governments should take care of people’s health, so they should implement some rules and laws for that.
It goes without saying that in this sophisticated modern era, one of the most important concerns of many governments around the world is decreasing health of their citizens. A country can never make progress in science, technology, economy, and so on without having healthy nations. In this respect, some efforts must be made to alleviate the situation. The controversial question which arises here is whether governments should shoulder the improving health of their citizens or it is up to individuals. As far as I am concerned, intervention states could ensure health of their people but the role of each individual cannot be disregarded.
The first vital point to bear in mind is that the more advanced and improved public transportation could lead to the lower air pollution. So, governments should allocate a substantial amount of budget to this section, which can certainly contribute to a better environmental condition, and consequently, healthier nations. An example can drive this notion home. Once, I read an article in one website about the newly-established regulation in one of the metropolitan cities in the USA a couple of month ago. It was mentioned in the article, the mayor of the that city decided to dedicate a large portion of budget to improving the public transportation hoping that the air quality and public health will enhance. After eight or night months, results were amazing. According to environmentalists’ and public health center reports, there were a dramatic decrease in the number of pollutants and respiratory diseases. So, not only did this rule provide that city with a suitable infrastructure, but it also led to a sharp improvement in the health of citizens.
On the other hand, there is no doubt that individuals must take some responsibility for their health. To be more specific, people could surprisingly improve their health just by stopping doing some activities. Nowadays, people have desk-bound lifestyle as a result of possibilities and facilities offered by the modern technology such as using cars for going everywhere instead of walking and sitting in front of computer for long time. Besides, there is serious issues associated with nutrition. Although governments have been making some great efforts in improving quality of nourishment, individuals make ultimate decision in choosing type of nutrition. For instance, instead of consuming good nutrition including vegetables, fresh foods, and so forth, there is growing tendency among people to eat fast food and other meals that contain saturated fat. The results are easily predictable. Health problems like heart failure and cancer are increasing at an alarming rate, and the situation is very likely to deteriorate in future. Indeed, if people took care more about themselves, there would be fewer health problems. To put it in a more vivid picture, one of my best friends had sedentary lifestyle, to say nothing of his bad eating habits. All of these together resulted in his liver cancer, and unfortunately, he died young, at the age of 28. Had my friend done a little exercise and prevented himself from eating fast food, which is definitely a personal choice, he would be alive enjoying himself.
In conclusion, having aforementioned reasons and examples into account, one can infer that to have healthy nations, a combination of governments and individuals’ effort is required. Government by enacting some proper rules and individuals by paying more attention to their health and avoiding doing some bad activities could improve public health.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...activities could improve public health.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, first, if, may, so, for instance, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.0752688172 272% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3007.0 1977.66487455 152% => OK
No of words: 567.0 407.700716846 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30335097002 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87972968509 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.121338375 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 323.0 212.727598566 152% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569664902998 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 938.7 618.680645161 152% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.3450916961 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.37037037 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.88888888889 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.292125218778 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0698692846316 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0796996299204 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175347880612 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.053632614246 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 157.0 86.8835125448 181% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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