Some people believe that success in life comes from taking risks or chances. Others believe that success results from careful planning. In your opinion, where does success come from? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Sometimes, Life can be very demanding and the things you have to deal with in life can have a huge impact on your energy levels and the achievement of your success. Some people think that success comes from taking risks and chances but; in my view, success results from good planning for some specific reasons.
First, we can manage time better and tackle the problems. For example, I remember the days that I had to study for my final exams; I used to balance my time and allocate different parts of books to specific time. So, my stress was reduced and I could also review the book at the end of the day.
Second, by planning to reach to our goal, we can review the steps better. For example, when I used to work on my thesis in university, every steps were planned and scheduled very well; I also used my professor's experiences. I used to review all the steps of my job in blocks of time occasionally. So I was less overwhelmed when the deadline was going to be finished.
In conclusion, although sometimes we need to take risks to reach to our goals in life, careful planning is one of the important factors to preclude the obstacles and achieve success. For example, I know someone who used to be just a simple employee. He had a passion for becomming successful and getting promoted in his life. He was a real risk taker. Once, he decided to start his own bussiness. First of all, he planned for what he wanted to do; in addition he used some of his friends experiences. Then, he took a big risk and stated his new job. Now he has become a rich and successful entrepreneur. He said to me, "without good planning, I would never reach to my aim".
So; in my view, although sometimes we should take risks, careful planning is much more important.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 352, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Once” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... in his life. He was a real risk taker. Once, he decided to start his own bussiness....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, then, well, for example, in addition, in conclusion, first of all, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1442.0 1977.66487455 73% => OK
No of words: 322.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.47826086957 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5802650703 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537267080745 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 451.8 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.3197897932 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.8947368421 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9473684211 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.84210526316 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205756614425 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0604060115878 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0950690810239 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118344897222 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.141266169024 0.0645574589148 219% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.1 11.7677419355 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.41 10.9000537634 77% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.18 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => The average readability is low. Need to improve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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