Many people think that when they are busy, it is better to squish their children in their schedule rather than letting them play n their own. They say that this helps increase the bond between the parents and the kids. Although I understand their point of view, I have a different opinion. I think it is better to let the kids do some activities on their own because this will increase the awareness of the kids, and actually this may save the parents-kids relationship.
First, every day we live, we learn something new. This applies to kids too. When kids notice that their parents don't have time right now to spend with them, or their parents have a lot to do, they start to play on their own. This how they start to be aware of what is going around them. Playing or doing some activities helps them hold responsibilities because in this case, they found themselves responsible for their own enjoyment and the wise usage of their time. For example, a week ago I was so busy after finishing my work with studying and doing some home chores, also helping my son with his school project. After we have done with the school project, my younger daughter asked me to play with her. I was so stressed out with all the things I have to do in that tight time. I apologized to her. What was so amazing is that I found my son telling his youngest sister that she should leave me alone to do my stuff and he would play with her. I was so proud of him because literally he was aware of the situation and with the people around him and he tried to help each one. He helped me by playing with his sister, at the same time he made his sister happy by sharing her in playing. I think also his sister learned that she has to be aware of what is going on around her.
Second, kids become so happy when they share work or activities with their parents especially if it is one to one activity. On the other hand, kids get so upset when parented pretend to share the kids their activities, but they are really not. For example, when parents set on the ground to play with the kids but they really watching the game on the television, or when the whole family set for dinner but the parents are scrolling their cell phones not talking with their kids. This actually destroys the parents-kids relationship. I was watching a video report about what kids really miss about their parents and ninety-five percent of the kids said they are missing the actual presence of their parents. That is why I'm against the idea of doing a job while pretending to be sharing kids their activities or their schoolwork. Giving the kids a quality time even if it is not much is better than giving them fake time, this strengthens the relationship and the other destroys it.
In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above, I encourage each parent to share real quality time with their kids and if they don't have time let the kids bare the responsibility and learn how to aware of the surrounded situations. If we did that, we will create a wonderful generation who really cares.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, may, really, second, so, then, while, as to, for example, i think, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 101.0 43.0788530466 234% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2487.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 559.0 407.700716846 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.44901610018 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86242540663 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37800685847 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.432915921288 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 751.5 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 9.59856630824 219% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.0715941332 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.6538461538 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.03846153846 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211980524731 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0683610713147 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0698143525109 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135847753229 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0468211099637 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.54 58.1214874552 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.53 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.77 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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