Nowadays parents are so busy on working so they can only squeeze a little of time to be accompanied by their children. Thus, how to use the time wisely becomes a controversial problem. Some people believe to spend that time to help their children with homework is best for them. While others prefer to take advantage of that time to have fun with their children. Personally, I would choose the second option. I feel this way for the following reasons.
Firstly, having fun with children creates the unique and special memories and builds a beneficial relationship between parents and children. Have you ever imagine a picture watching old photographs by yourself when you are 65 years old? Your son is 1000 miles away and he is too busy at work to come back to see you. Take my neighbor for example, he is an old man who lives alone in a huge apartment. He worked as a software engineer in the biggest company in my country so he didn't have time to be with his son. When he had time, he checked his son's homework and punished his son when his son failed an exam. Finally, his son left him and got a job oversea after his wife died. Every time I see him, he tells me that if he had spent more time on hanging out with his son he would not have to live alone.
Second, sports is good for physical development. A responsible parent should not only focus on the academic development of his children but also physical development. By doing so, children can grow up in a healthy way. Needless to say, doing exercise help children relax and release the stress in school. Moreover, children can find their interest in sports. According to a research, almost 90 percent of talented athletics find their interest in the sport when they were less than 8 years old. Therefore, if all the parents limit their children to develop their own talent, there will be fewer brilliant athletics today.
For the two reasons, playing games or sports is no doubt the best way for parents to spend time with children.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...hildren with homework is best for them. While others prefer to take advantage of that...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...the biggest company in my country so he didnt have time to be with his son. When he h...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a healthy way" with adverb for "healthy"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ment. By doing so, children can grow up in a healthy way. Needless to say, doing exercise help c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, i feel, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1636.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 360.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.54444444444 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44933223452 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572222222222 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.999586774 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.3636363636 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3636363636 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22727272727 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.351844750598 0.236089414692 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0987447380527 0.076458572812 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0982394159669 0.0737576698707 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229432743388 0.150856017488 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109736275231 0.0645574589148 170% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.1 11.7677419355 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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