Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Nowadays, the world is so competitive that both mothers and fathers need to work hard to afford their family's livelihood. The modern hectic life leaves them with only a small amount of time to be around their children. However, since the time is limited, how to spend them the most effectively also becomes a problem. Some think that parents should spend their free time enjoying playing games or sports with their kids while others are of the opinion that this confined time should be contributed to education. To my view, the advantages brought by the former outweigh those of the latter.
First of all, participating in outdoor activities together tightens family bonds and children can learn important values. Since sports or games are always full of excitement and most children would obviously prefer playing to studying, family members would enjoy themselves a lot. Moreover, through these activities, children can learn about the team spirits, for example how each member should support each other. An illustration is my uncle's family. My uncle is a businessman who are usually on business trips while my aunt works as a doctor in the city's hospital. Because of busy work, they can be around with my cousins for a few days every month, most of which is spent outdoors. The whole family often plays badminton or basketball in their yard or in the city's park and sometimes goes to the city game center for bowling. Their family members can still maintain a harmonious relationship despite a constraint of spare time. Apparently, although the time that they are together is limited, the experience is pleasant and valuable to their children.
In addition, schoolwork usually brings pressure to both parents and kids, which is not favorable to their relationship. Not all children are good at studying, therefore, their poor performance might irritate the parents, who already cope with a great deal of stress at work place. As a result, reprimand seems unavoidable, which is, under no circumstances, healthy for a relationship. For instance, my uncle family, before having such a close connection like today, used to be under a lot of strains. My aunt gave my cousins assistance with their schoolwork. This created a lot of burden to my cousins that they would invent some excuse to avoid spending time with her. Fortunately, my uncle and aunt noticed this and changed their approach so that they can be happy like at present. They find some tutors to help my cousins with their schooling and play with my cousins in their leisure time instead. All in all, parents should not waste their precious free time in helping their children with homework, which seemingly only does harm to their rapport.
In conclusion, I believe that parents preoccupied with work should use their little spare time for joining activities like games or sports with their children instead of assisting their study.This enables them to create beautiful memories together and allows children to learn more about social life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 193, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: This
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, first, however, if, moreover, so, still, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2516.0 1977.66487455 127% => OK
No of words: 497.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06237424547 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61179557786 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521126760563 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 747.9 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.6393866178 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.833333333 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7083333333 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282594371327 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.081537186297 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0706081840812 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199533494808 0.150856017488 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0390915834262 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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