Some people like to keep a record of their own experiences by uploading pictures and other information to social-networking sites. Other people prefer not to create such records.Which approach do you prefer, and why?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The advent of social media had profound impacts on daily lives in so many ways. These influences were negative to some extent. Personally, I believe sharing every little detail of our life in a virtual space could bring remorse in the future for ourselves. I will elaborate my reasons in the following essay.
The most significant reason is that by sharing everything on a social media, we are giving strangers the access to our lives details. Our pictures can orbit among some sick people and they can readily get obsessed with us. Most of the people don’t think about this aspect of these media while they share their photos, however I believe this should be taken seriously. For instance, there was a case of true crime I was reading about the other day. It was about a cute teenager girl who shared so many of her experiences and memories on her social account and she had myriad followers. Among her followers there was a stranger guy who had crush on her. He got to approach her through direct message and shortly after that they got friends, which wasn’t a hard thing by knowing everything about her. However, the guy was sick and although he was not her boyfriend, he felt jealous about her. Finally, after a sequence of events he decided to murder her so as not to let anyone have her, which he did and shared her dead body picture on the same social media. This isn’t an ordinary thing that happen every day, but I am strongly of the opinion that the chance is not zero so we must be cautious about what we share with strangers.
Moreover, although I surf these media as a pastime and enjoy finding out about my friends’ lives , I am not a type of person to easily share every thing. I find myself as an introverted person and there only a few people who I dare to open up to and tell about my life. For instance, whenever I tried to share a post on my Instagram, I got the cold feet and felt insecure about it. I feel so anxious about my picture that after a while the picture that I thought was pretty, starts to look hideous to me. As a result, after having an account on Instagram for about eight years, I only has a posted picture on that.
In conclusion, posting stuff on virtual space always require cautious and confidence, however my personality can barely take the risk.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 97, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...njoy finding out about my friends’ lives , I am not a type of person to easily sha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, however, if, look, moreover, so, while, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1883.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.48333333333 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3647986528 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52619047619 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.1242300956 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.15 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0776372006681 0.236089414692 33% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0270170761862 0.076458572812 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0231641810869 0.0737576698707 31% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0380869298711 0.150856017488 25% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0270641447415 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.7 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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