Some people like to keep a record of their own experiences by uploading pictures and other information to social-networking sites. Other people prefer not to create such records.Which approach do you prefer, and why?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Our debating issues have gotten more complex with technology development, like invitation of social media platforms, for we encountered inordinate number of novel appliances, softwares, applications and etcetera. Accordingly, some individuals, satisfyingly, keep a record of what they have been through on social-networking websites whereas a number of people are not fond of uploading their information on such websites. The second group conduct sounds more rational to me for the reasons that will be discussed in subsequent paragraphs.
It is acknoaledged that ,nowadays, lots of humans around the world are suffering from others judgemental statements. Rate of offensing expressions is surprisingly high on aforementioned social platforms because users feel free to comment their oppinions without considering the content owner dignity. In other words, people will be able to humiliate each other and act offensively if they are not aquintances. Consequently, large number of users of that websites, especially teenagers, are struggeling with mental health difficulties.
Furthermore, this records can be used agains you. Since the transmition pace of data is unbelievablly fast in applications like Face Book and Instagram, you would not be able to proove you are right before getting harmed by a fake acusition if you were attacked by some enemies. Therefore, it seems more logical to stay away from posting anything in a virtual place to which everyone is able to have access; that is why some politicians and celebrities do not sign up in them.
To recapitulate, not only is recording personal information in a public virtual area pleasant for all individuals, but it can be detrimental for a number of them. The reason is that youngsters' feelings is the target of some offenders in the aforementioned platforms. Besides, famous faces could experience genuinely intolerable sitiuations if they share their daily pictures with some followers.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, besides, but, consequently, furthermore, if, second, so, therefore, whereas, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1660.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 299.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.55183946488 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.29624750168 2.67179642975 123% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.642140468227 0.524837075471 122% => OK
syllable_count: 524.7 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.5003303258 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.692307692 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256469639047 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0784910427326 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0631703695874 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13460889054 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0225172976308 0.0645574589148 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 11.7677419355 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.21 58.1214874552 54% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.21 10.9000537634 140% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.9 8.01818996416 123% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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