Some people like to keep a record of their own experiences by uploading pictures and other information to social networking sites Other people prefer not to create such records Which approach do you prefer and why Use specific reasons and examples to supp

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Some people like to keep a record of their own experiences by uploading pictures and other information to social-networking sites.Other people prefer not to create such records.
Which approach do you prefer and why?
Use specific reasons and examples to support you answer.

With the rapid development of science and technology, people prefer to use mobile phones or laptops as a record to upload many precious pictures or meaningful videos on personal social account. While others hold the view that it is not a good idea to create such records. As far as I am concerned, I am in favor of the approach that putting some pictures and other information to social-networking sites is a great way to document life.
First of all, photos and videos of personal life uploaded on social-networking sites records people's current life so that they can have a good memory in the future. There are some moments in life that are especially precious for people. For example, when people go through a lot of hard work to get accepted by their dream university, they would take some beautiful pictures of the campus and share their happiness with others on social-networking sites. Many years later, when people saw these old pictures again, they would still remember how they felt at that time. Some people also take a lot of videos at their wedding to record the most precious moments of their life. After they uploaded these videos on the social account, many people would give them their sincere wishes. No matter how many years later, when they saw these videos and wishes, they could recall what they looked like when they got married. However, if people are not willing to create these records, it could be hard for them to remember those valuable memory. Therefore, it is necessary for people to upload pictures and other messages to social-networking sites.
What is more, staying actively social contacts allow us to better maintain relationships and make new friends. Nowadays, people have many friends on social networking sites, some are old friends they already know, some are new friends they may not have met before. Individuals can make comment on photos of old friends on the website, keep abreast of their current lives and show concern to them. People could also find some new friends who may have the same interests or do the similar job. With these new friends, people could get a lot of useful information and enrich their lives. Conversely, if people refuse to create personal records and never check others’ records, they may lose contact with friends who barely have time to meet with each other. And their life would lose lots of interesting things to share with. Hence, people who stay active on social sites are better able to maintain friendships with their friends than rejecting to create such records.
To sum up, the convenience brought by the Internet could provide us a more broad world to share personal information and communicate with other people. So, using social-networking sites to record your own life and making a beautiful memory for yourself.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 195, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...gful videos on personal social account. While others hold the view that it is not a g...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, conversely, first, hence, however, if, look, may, so, still, therefore, while, for example, first of all, to sum up, what is more

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2332.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 474.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91983122363 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61281958529 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.466244725738 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 716.4 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.7194827846 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.0 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5454545455 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.13636363636 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.343299275804 0.236089414692 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113141007793 0.076458572812 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0660343243717 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23257859783 0.150856017488 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0650166720172 0.0645574589148 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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