Nowadays people all around the world have different kind of goals and dreams. These dreams are people's strongest impetus to continue their life and would help people figure out their best way of living. There is a drastic contrast between different people on whether it is a good idea to just focus on ambitious dreams and ideas or to focus on just realistic goals. While it is contradicted by many that it is an effective idea to concentrate on their ambitious notions, I incline to believe that thinking and focusing on ambitious ideas will help individuals to achieve their goals more easily. There are some reasons I will state to support my claim.
In my opinion the first and most crucial reason is that thinking deeply about an idea would help people to move toward that special idea more efficient. It is an undebated fact that people make their lives based on their feelings and fancy ideas. There was a movie named "Secret" that was made to announce people about the power of minds. In that movie it was mentioned that, people who think about their goals more ambitiously would obtain that goal sooner. The movie's idea was that it is our ambitious ideas that turn to reality in a long run. As a tangible example, a scientific research undertaken by the University of Toronto has asserted that the amount of people success on achieving their goals is positively correlated with their mind's ability to flourish an ambitious idea about the goal and their stability in following their fantasy ideas. So, I adhere to this belief that power of dreaming would lead people to be more prosperous.
Furthermore, another reason which has to be considered is that people are mentally alive just due to dreaming. Just think about what would be happen if you cannot think about your dreams. You will absolutely get mentally sick. Dreaming and thinking about ambitious goals cause people distract about life's problems. It would give the people a cement ability to pass the problems they are confronting. To illustrate more when I was studying master's degree at University, I got some depression due to large amount of campus works. I visited a doctor and he proposed me to think about the dreams you are trying to obtain instead of realistic ideas. It was a turning point in my life. I got better gradually in a surprising way. I think all is just about power of mind.
Drawing upon the reasons -- turning ambitious ideas to reality -- and -- distracting people from their problems-- although there are some reasons which are excluded from the general rule, I am to a large extent on the belief that thinking about ambitious and fantasy ideas will let people to follow their dreams easier. It is recommended that psychologist conduct some strong study to determine which methods of thinking is more helpful for people.
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- At work or school, you might encounter a problem that requires creativity -for example, you are given a task to complete that is very different from other tasks you do. In work or school situation that requires you to think creatively, would you prefer to 73
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- TPO 54 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 76
- TPO 52do you agree or disagree? the rules that the whole societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 96, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'peoples the strongest'.
Suggestion: peoples the strongest
...d of goals and dreams. These dreams are peoples strongest impetus to continue their life and woul...
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Line 3, column 474, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'movies'' or 'movie's'?
Suggestion: movies'; movie's
...usly would obtain that goal sooner. The movies idea was that it is our ambitious ideas...
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Line 5, column 704, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a surprising way" with adverb for "surprising"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...oint in my life. I got better gradually in a surprising way. I think all is just about power of min...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, so, while, as to, i think, kind of, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.0752688172 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2350.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 482.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8755186722 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68556276237 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55281047517 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.464730290456 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 728.1 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.1026556555 48.9658058833 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.9166666667 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0833333333 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.04166666667 5.45110844103 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273599097108 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0855596090957 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0566783702145 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194929312976 0.150856017488 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0302901009469 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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