The Internet is an important part of modern world. Every day people search on the Internet to get access to thire needed information. While some people believe that we gain lots of valuable information accessing to the Interner, I strongly believe that that much infromation is very harmful for most of the people. To support my idea, I have some great reasons.
First, the Internet wastes lots of users's time. Using the Internet is very attractive and people even do not notice the time passing. Therefore, searching and surfing on the Internet and moving between pages, people lose lots of times every day. There are lots of backlinks on the Internet which make you to move between web pages. If the user wont be aware of the time, the person would waste lots of time on the repetitive and sometimes junk information. The junk information will be useless for
Second, most of the Information on the Interner is useless. Although the Internet provides lots of information, however, if you would search for some specific topic on it, you will encounter with too much useless or less related and repetitive information. For example, I vivedly remember that Once I had a project for soil physics class in B.Sc. degree, I used the Internet to find needed articles. However, I just spent lots of time on unnecessary articles and wasted lots of time. Although, my friends had just used traditional printed books to do their project, they were able to deliver their project at time. But I was continuing to write a massive document by the information I had collected from the Internet and I did not know when to stop the writing because of the huge amount of available information on the Internet. Then at the end of the semester, I delivered a thick document to my professor. Unfortunately he gave me the loswest score on the course and explained that I did not need to write that much content for the project.
To sum, lots of available infromation on the Internet causes problems for the users. It wastes their time and provides unnecessary, repetitive and some useless less related junk information. We sould be aware of the useless information on the Internet and manage our time when we are using it.
- TOEFL TPO 31 - Integrated Writing Task 83
- TPO-46 - Independent Writing TaskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement?The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.Use specific reasons and examp 80
- TPO 44 - Integrated Writing Task 90
- Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives.Which viewpoint do you agree with? 70
- Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives.Which viewpoint do you agree with? 76
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, so, then, therefore, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1827.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 381.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79527559055 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67861882216 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488188976378 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 592.2 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.6743637066 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.35 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.05 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.6 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271304549616 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0848983483551 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0595702199049 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17544060894 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0421377899535 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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