Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?
The internet has drastically changed our world and people with a small click can access to broad sources of information. when it comes to availability of this amount of information some controversy arises and some people believe this issue can cause problems and I concur with them. In the ensuing lines, I will explain two reasons to substantiate my viewpoint.
First, hardly can people distinct genuine information from fake ones and too much information can be confusing. when people search for a topic thousands of sites related to the subject are suggested to them in some cases information in a site is completely opposite of another site. Besides, sometimes some people upload biased and fake information deliberately to mislead others and this is conventional in many websites. In this way, if people find out that something is wrong with the information they had to check many websites to find the correct information and they may not be successful in it. Take me as an example, once I wanted to write a paper for my anthropology class about the time that modern human came to existence. I checked many websites and papers but each of them presented a different time based on their experiment and archeological observation. Finally, I had no choice but to change my topic because I did not want to get a low grade for an uncertain topic.
Second, too much information can divert people from the main topic for which they are looking that can be time-consuming. when people start looking for a certain piece of information they come across to various information unrelated to the main topic that can distract them. if they start checking this unrelated information, a short search will continue for hours that is a waste of time, moreover, they may forget about the main topic. For instance, when someone tries to find a vocabulary in an online dictionary different pops up about university programs, language courses, different hotels, etc. come out which can distract her and a small search will turn to a long process. I have a big problem with too much information because whenever I try to start a paper and look into the online papers there is too much information and I do not know how to start and write about which part.
In conclusion, based on aforementioned explanations and examples, I agree with the idea that too much information on the internet can cause problems because it is hard to make difference between genuine and wrong information and a lot of information would be confusing, also, they can distract people from the main topic which can be time-consuming.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, if, look, may, moreover, second, so, for instance, in conclusion, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.0752688172 272% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2162.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91363636364 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87993557664 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 684.0 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.4156667327 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.176470588 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8823529412 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.76470588235 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 11.8709677419 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248278247741 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0875859638117 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0746951979377 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182704033068 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0353370434767 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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