From my personal perspective, it is wrong to donate money to people living on the street. In general, there has been some volunteer activities to help them that providing foods, clothes, and place to stay, however giving money is actually facilitaing their not preferable life as a human being. The following paragraphs hold my opinion.
First of all, I would say that beggars are usually homeless, drug addicted, or alcholic. Even, we are protected by the law to have freedom referred as a human rights like everyone in the same society, they should think that their daily circumstances are really good for them. For example, I have been to San Francisco and there were so many street people to drink beers or smoking weeds. They own money to buy those products however they wear used clothes or donation shoeses. In my own opinion, they ask for money to spend for their bad habits. Hence, giving money for them is not good for them because they could not leave behind their addiction.
Second, we make money with skills, talents, and effort, so some people think if you were not educated or trained well, you could not make money enough to support yourself. However, I have strong opposing opinion. At least in Japan, there are many job opportunies that no need to show your high proficiency and background career. Japan is a country known for less homeless people because a goverment offer the daily or short span job as financial aid. Likewise, the cost of hotels in Tokyo are varied like cupel hotel is affordable to anyone. Therefore, it is not hard to get back life as a indendent person even you have not had any outstanding career before.
As I explained my opinion with examples, money is one of the solution to make their life better but we need to be a bit strict for them. We are not supposed to give money to them, we should think about thier life as a human being. There must not be a gap between us. Every single person have human right, and we should support them to have healthy stable life as a human being.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 243, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun job seems to be countable; consider using: 'many jobs'.
Suggestion: many jobs
...g opinion. At least in Japan, there are many job opportunies that no need to show your h...
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Line 5, column 589, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ore, it is not hard to get back life as a indendent person even you have not had ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, hence, however, if, likewise, really, second, so, therefore, well, at least, for example, in general, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1676.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 362.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62983425414 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36426650622 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.555248618785 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 525.6 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.7429717163 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.2105263158 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0526315789 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.15789473684 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224192308344 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0658189932565 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0611591151872 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138573001204 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.029715770163 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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