Everyone should see the city where connect two continents to each other, Istanbul. It has an amazing historical places and great view. However, the city has a big problem about beggars. There are so much beggars living in the streets asking for money. You can see them everywhere. There is a hot topic of debate between people that should we give beggars money or not. I am not the person who defends that we should give them money.
People can think that they have to beggar because of life's circumstances or situations, but I don't agree with that. Everyone in society should work and earn money for caring their life even if hoping to get bread and butter so we shouldn’t give them money for help because it is not fair for working people. When someone gives the money to them, obviously he/she pushes society to the dark. The main reason of my idea is that they can think, there is always a way to earn money without work and I don’t believe we help them or the life by doing that. It will cause to increase their numbers, that’s all. For example, I have seen the news that parents who are beggars use their own children for begging. It causes more trouble in the society, in my opinion.
Looking from society, giving money to beggars can also affect children in a bad way. It can demonstrate that working is not the solution. They can think in their minds there is always a solution to earn money. Moreover, I have seen at the news that some beggars earn thousands of money from begging but they are keeping to do that because it makes them lazy and selfish. I don’t think that instance can make our children more helpful instead of more lazy and deceptive person, so it can break social bonds and rules starting to children.
Even if life can sometimes hurt one of us, it is not the way fixing it. Giving money to them doesn’t solve the problem; in fact it will affect our society in a worse way. People should work and earn money without begging because we teach our children to do that.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 200, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...big problem about beggars. There are so much beggars living in the streets asking fo...
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Line 3, column 95, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ifes circumstances or situations, but I dont agree with that. Everyone in society sh...
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Line 3, column 576, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'increasing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: increasing
...r the life by doing that. It will cause to increase their numbers, that's all. For exa...
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Line 3, column 667, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...mple, I have seen the news that parents who are beggars use their own children for begg...
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Line 5, column 72, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a bad way" with adverb for "bad"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ney to beggars can also affect children in a bad way. It can demonstrate that working is not...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, moreover, so, for example, in fact, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1663.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 367.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.53133514986 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29543616036 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.482288828338 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 508.5 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.7654341135 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.5909090909 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6818181818 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.59090909091 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268686140134 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0822964152996 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0651941267944 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173257325296 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0331622572487 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 11.7677419355 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.7 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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