Some people think that the family is the most important influence on young adults. Other people think that friends are the most important influence on young adults. Which view do you agree with? Use examples
We all are influence of someone or the other we meet. Everyone has their own role model. In the case concerning our future it is absolutely important in choosing the correct role model which is directly proportional to our career. Hence, I believe that our family is the most important influence than our friends.
We are what our surrounding is. Friends do play a crucial part in our life. They are also one kind of stress busters whenever we aren’t fine. They always help us to be a better person as a personality. When it comes to elderly people at home, they are more experienced and wise in decision making which is why experienced means sophisticated. We get the best advice from our elders when compared to our friends. Though friends are the ones with whom we share everything, Family is the one that can give us the best advice in choosing our career. This is not always the case when compared to people living in the western countries. For instance, children living in United States have an entirely different lifestyle compared to the ones in India. They leave parents at a very small age, take care of themselves by doing part time jobs and finding their future career. Since, most of them are not with parents, they rely on their strengths and in this case friends play an important role. It is also important that what kind of influence they have.
In conclusion, I would like to say that family is the most important influence as they always take us in right path.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
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Line 5, column 87, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... is the most important influence as they always take us in right path.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, if, so, for instance, in conclusion, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1227.0 1977.66487455 62% => OK
No of words: 264.0 407.700716846 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64772727273 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52889352413 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 212.727598566 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530303030303 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 389.7 618.680645161 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.6730622502 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.1764705882 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5294117647 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.35294117647 5.45110844103 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181258122293 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0617921289821 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0628884285449 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151540979443 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0234669757646 0.0645574589148 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 11.7677419355 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.39 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.77 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 86.8835125448 46% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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