Some people think that human needs for farmland housing and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals Do you agree or disagree with this point of view Why or why not Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Some people think that human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. Do you agree or disagree with this point of view? Why or why not? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

The usage of natural resources for human benefit has been a controversial topic since the industrial revolution and its implications for Earth's health. Some people claim that we should give priority to the improvement of mankind. Others believe that the conservation of nature must be our biggest concern. In my opinion, we should recognize the importance of land for endangered animals. I feel these way because of the following reasons.

To begin with, I think nature, specially land and water, belongs to the natives animals within it. Animals, specially endangered species, are an important part of the ecosystem, which needs equilibrium. For example, near my house there was a huge and vivid natural reserve which contained hundreds of native species of animals unique to that region of the world. The ecosystem was in harmony until a big project of building complexes was started, chopping down hundreds of trees and killing a big deal of organisms. This unbalanced the thin equilibrium there inhabited, as a result, this caused a huge loss in diversity in fauna and flora. I strongly believe that all this suffering could have been avoided should we have respected the animal's right to land.

Moreover, losing diversity and animals species is a lose for humanity too, in terms of scientific knowledge. Humans are not the only ones inhabiting the planet Earth. Respectively, other organisms have as big of an importance as our needs have in terms of how many resources we should allocate for them. Additionally, the scientific community, specially biologists and botanics, have a strong interest in studying other life forms and the relationship between them. Mega-projects, such as farmlands or housing expansion, are directly threatening the study of these species by decreasing population of wild animals and changing a specie's habits, which is one of the main problem that for endangered species. I think the expansion of the human civilization does not justify how this limits out capability to understand Earth's history and life forms.

To conclude, it is my belief that priorizing humans needs over those of animals is not the proper approach to mankind growth. Mainly because doing so violates animal's rights and hurts our own scientific knowledge about other organisms in the planet Earth.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 396, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this way' or 'these ways'?
Suggestion: this way; these ways
... of land for endangered animals. I feel these way because of the following reasons. To...
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Line 5, column 51, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...losing diversity and animals species is a lose for humanity too, in terms of scientifi...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, so, for example, i feel, i think, such as, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1943.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 371.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2371967655 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84668022797 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563342318059 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 607.5 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2511188269 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.263157895 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5263157895 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15789473684 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220357442055 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0638101748192 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.043171468939 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128677786934 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0295432160363 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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