Many people dream of becoming famous television or movie actors, and sometimes such fame begins at an early age. Child stars often get their education through private tutoring and have only limited opportunities for social interaction with other children outside of the acting profession. Should parents encourage their young children to become a famous movie or television stars? Write a persuasive essay that develops and supports your opinion on this issue.
The development of the current 4.0 era. The demand for the entertainment of the people is increasing and there are many popular dramas and theaters, along with that the actors are also interested and loved more. Actor training companies were born and they are training new actors. The children are being trained professionally to become the celebrities of the future.
First of all, Being famous will help you make money from a young age. You will partly help your family with economics, buy the items you like. You will be admired by your friends of the same age. Moreover, the family will also be very proud because their child can be financially independent at such a young age. Second, You will become the idol of the same age group. Known by many and you will probably be the leading fashion trendsetter. Being admired by everyone and becoming the standard for everyone to look forward to. The last one, You will have more new relationships and more experiences than few people have. You will be exposed to many different environments that will help you to be more improvised. And deal with difficult situations at ease.
All in all, becoming a celebrity has many benefits. Besides, there are many temptations that are like a double-edged sword, so parents have to teach their children properly so that the future stars can go their own way without falling into it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 643, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...few people have. You will be exposed to many different environments that will help you to be m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, if, look, moreover, second, so, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1531.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 307.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98697068404 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60888668246 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553745928339 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.390447037 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.55 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.35 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.3 5.45110844103 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0352632793078 0.236089414692 15% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0123655026401 0.076458572812 16% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0187026605964 0.0737576698707 25% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0219382893401 0.150856017488 15% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.020291331687 0.0645574589148 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.07 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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