Without a shadow of doubt, children need meticulous caring, especially when they are young (3-6 years old). The controversial question which arises here is whether they should be taken care of by someone else than their parents or not. As far as I am concerned, it is better to let older children take care of younger children. There are several noticeable reasons, two of which I will elucidate in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, the reason why it is a prudent course of action to assign taking younger children duty to older children lies in the fact that due to the hustle and bustle of hectic modern lifestyles, both of parents should work from dawn to dusk to meet their life needs which are becoming more demanding over time. As a result, in some cases, they cannot spend enough time taking care of their children, so they search for alternatives doing that task. It is axiomatic that the best alternatives are siblings, especially older children, who usually have a lot of free time. This task does matter to them since they love their family and consider this duty an important thing to show themselves responsible and reliable. For example, 12 years ago, when I was ten years old, I had a two-year-old brother who needed many considerations like playing with him or preparing his food. Moreover, both of my parents were occupied and did not have enough time to devote him. As a result, I took care of my brother and not only was solved my parents’ problem, but also I could show myself as a responsible person who is prepared for his future independent life.
Another equally noteworthy reason which deserves some words here is that taking care of children is a demanding task and needs a lot of attention. Consequently, younger children can prepare themselves for their future life and learn how to triumph over their difficulties they will encounter in their work or university. For example, I have a colleague who is in severe economic conditions and takes care of other children as a part-time job. One day talking to me, he was very satisfied with his condition and said that although this task made his schedule tougher than what he expects, this taught him how to gain his livelihood surplus doing university works and assignments.
In summary, all of the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that entrusting taking care of children responsibility to other children is a prudent course of action which has its certain benefits for both parents and children. It is highly recommended that parents surrender some simple and foremost duties to their older children as much as possible, even if they are not so bustled and have adequate free time to take care of their children themselves.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 13, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...y works and assignments. In summary, all of the aforementioned reasons lead us to the c...
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Line 7, column 466, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...take care of their children themselves.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, moreover, so, for example, in summary, as a result, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2273.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 467.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86723768737 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71471195709 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52034261242 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 702.0 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.7908628087 48.9658058833 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.705882353 100.406767564 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4705882353 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94117647059 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291865963842 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102807897312 0.076458572812 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0744145328212 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20875545113 0.150856017488 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.047576235135 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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