It is obvious that students’ opinions about different issues which will affect the conditions of their daily life on campous is important. Their decisions have siginificant effacts on improvement of their living condiions on campus. Some people assert that experts can make better decisions about the issues that is related to student’s living condotions, while I believe that it is much better for students to be involved in making decisions regarding the matters that influence their daily life in campus. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss my view using some reasons and examples.
I think it is more useful for students who participate in making decisions concerning the related issues on campus because the fact that they are directly affected by advantages or disadvantages of the related issues. Students are people who use the library or consume the food that is served at cafeteria, whereas, experts are not involved in this issued directly. As a result, students better know about the strengths and weaknesses of different matters on their campus and their opinions can be more constructive than expert’s views. In other words, it is etter for universities to allow students to tke part in makig decisions about these issues. For instance, in my university last term the cafeteria offocials decided to change the food in order to reduce the costs of students, while it led most of students to be forced to buy food outside of campus becasuse they did not like new foods.
Moreover, I believe that allowing students to be engaged in making decisions about such issues will give them a good opportunity to gain valuable experience. They will learn how to deal with problems which they will face in the future. they will learn how to find the best solutions for problems. that is, when they are involved in this peoces, it will pepare them for future decisions and it will cause them to be able to make decisions about more critical issues in ther future life.
To sum up, in my point of view, it is beneficial for students to be allowed to take part in making decisions about various matters on campus. Their decisions will have considerable effects on improving their living condition on campus. In addition, they will get invaluable experience which will be useful for their future.
- Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. 66
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The more money people have, the more they should give away to charity 60
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The food we ate in the past was healthier than the food we eat today. 70
- Do you agree or disagree? It is better to relax through watching a film and reading a book than doing physical exercises? 70
- Some young people are free in the evenings or have days off at school, which way can bring them the most benefit? 1. to accumulate work experience by a part-time job or volunteering in a community2. learning to play a sport3. learning to play a musical in 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: most of the students; most students
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Suggestion: They
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Suggestion: That
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, regarding, so, whereas, while, for instance, i think, in addition, as a result, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1936.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 386.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01554404145 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72105094244 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.468911917098 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 605.7 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.8434262877 48.9658058833 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.0 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.125 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4375 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2808419595 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103425492207 0.076458572812 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0631058969088 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183971522035 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0425467217037 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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