Many young adults prefer to move away from parents to enjoy there independence, while some prefer to stay with families for longer time. Some are forced to move away from parents due to location of universities or colleges and some purposely move away. I personally would prefer to live with my family longer for several reasons. Most important of them are to be disciplined, to not worry about money and to focus more on my academics.
First, I think the most important quality among any person is his discipline. While we live with our parents we have to follow certain sets of rules and be disciplined. This discipline would then help me further when I will be living an independent life. For example, I have a friend at university dorms who shares a room with his friend. When I visited his dorm, I noticed undone laundry and untidy room. Their eating and sleeping patterns where also unusual, due to which he had fallen ill several times during the years of college. Hence, I think if i live with my family, I would become more habitual to be disciplined which will later help me when I start living independently.
Second, saving money is a major problem when we are living independently. I'd say its one of a negative side of living independently as you'd always have much less money. Even though I will be independent I won't have enough money to enjoy it. With academic studies, lectures and projects there would be very less time for part time job. Buying food everyday will be costly, so I'd have to make my own food if I have rented a flat and stay out of campus. I remember my friends at the dorms eating cheap unhealthy foods like ramen to save money. This adversely affected their health. Not being able to save money will not only affect my ability to enjoy independent life but also affect my health. Thus I'd prefer to stay with family for longer time so I won't have to worry about my money until I finish my studies.
Finally, the another important benefit of staying with parents will be that there would be less things to worry about. I will be able to focus more on my studies. I won't have to worry about electricity bills, buying groceries, paying rent, cooking food and other stuff. For example, if I have a major test in couple of days, I won't have to worry about buying groceries or paying rent and concentrate completely on my studies. This would in turn help me secure more grades. Also, by working part time I can save more money. I can later use this money when I start living independently and have enough money if faced with an emergency. Hence, I think being able to focus more on y studies is more important than my independence.
Hence, I thing longer time with families would be a better option as it would make me stay disciplined, save money and be less worried of stuff like rent and bills while concentrating on my studies.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'hence', 'if', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'thus', 'while', 'for example', 'i think']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.206349206349 0.229887763892 90% => OK
Verbs: 0.197530864198 0.158761421928 124% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0793650793651 0.0866891130778 92% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0617283950617 0.046263068375 133% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0970017636684 0.0685040099705 142% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.109347442681 0.118717715034 92% => OK
Participles: 0.0493827160494 0.0351676179071 140% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.4952543729 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Infinitives: 0.042328042328 0.0309702414327 137% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0388007054674 0.0887237588012 44% => Some determiners wanted.
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0299823633157 0.0209618222197 143% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.015873015873 0.0139019557991 114% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2866.0 2387.08602151 120% => OK
No of words: 517.0 408.028673835 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.54352030948 5.86048508987 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76839952204 4.48200974243 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.280464216634 0.338922669872 83% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.170212765957 0.251872472559 68% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.112185686654 0.174417080927 64% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.063829787234 0.112833075102 57% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4952543729 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.448742746615 0.524397521467 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 51.779256775 59.2087087015 87% => OK
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6684587814 140% => OK
Sentence length: 17.8275862069 20.5533526081 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.0069807885 48.84282405 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.8275862069 120.699889404 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8275862069 20.5533526081 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.448275862069 0.644075263715 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.54480286738 234% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 34.8488628026 45.7405998639 76% => OK
Elegance: 1.02475247525 1.45489161554 70% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242368159773 0.300154397459 81% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0985028330342 0.103427244359 95% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.100439142936 0.0752933317313 133% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.423705579986 0.497263757937 85% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.173111446183 0.151897553556 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.075357660174 0.114077575197 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0732267405889 0.0781384742642 94% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.308488598901 0.336927656856 92% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0838634293529 0.067059652881 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16556938961 0.210909579961 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0714017649297 0.0618886996521 115% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8870967742 151% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.86379928315 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.91756272401 81% => OK
Positive topic words: 16.0 8.42114695341 190% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 2.4623655914 244% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 24.0 13.6433691756 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.