Family is the most basic yet the most important unit in this society. We as human beings find it very difficult to live in isolation and constantly seek human companionship in the form of family and friends. Young adults like teenagers and those in their early twenties, are in a very difficult phase in their lives, they find their parents too overbearing , too controlling and yearn for more independance. They seek and enjoy the company of friends , over that of their parents. This can be dangerous, since people at this stage in life can easily be lead astray: they can be easily persuaded by their friends to lead a careless, reckless life or even a life of crime. It is essential that young adults live with their parents at this crucial stage in life, since parental guidance ensures that they don't fall into bad company and ruin their future.
Young people who are studying or are just launching their careers will face strained financial conditions. Students will have to constantly borrow from their parents or live off loans to make ends meet. If they live in the same city as their parents it makes perfect logical sense to live in their parents home. By doing so they can avoid racking up huge loans and perhaps even start saving for the future and eventually move out when they are financially capable and mature enough to do so.
Parental care and guidance is crucial in shaping up our lives. When we are in our teens or in our early twenties we are unable to discern the right from the wrong due to a lack of exposure to the harsh realities of the world. Parents usually are better judges of what is appropriate and what is not. It seems very foolish to reject our parents and their guidance in the pursuit of independence. Inorder to fly we need strong wings, there is a right time for everything . It is better that young adults live with their parents and take advantage of their wisdom, learn to become responsible citizens and move out only when they are mature enough to face life on their own.
Living with parents also ensures that children lead more disciplined lives. Many students fall prey to pressure of exams and study and eat in an erractic manner thus ruining their health. Parents ensure that their wards lead healthy and disciplined lives irrespective of the pressure on the student.Even in the case of an individual who is working the thought of going back home to ones parents ensure that we do not engage in activity that would elicit our parent's disapproval. People out on a night of revelry may be prevented from consuming too much alcohol or partying late at night if they have to go back to their parent's home.
In addition to the monetary benefits and the guidance and care young adults can receive by living with their parents, they can also build closer family bonds. Living with parents increases the time one spends with one's family, thus enabling them to understand and appreciate their parents better, this in turn will result in a greater sense of family. A person with strong family bonds will be emotionally more balanced and lead a more fulfilling and happier life . Weaker family bonds result in excessive dependence on friends for company and advice , which may not necessarily be a good thing for an individual's growth. Friends can lead one astray but it is highly unlikely that one's parents would do so.
Living with parents have multiple benefits for a young adults. It ensures that they do not make bad friends, lead disciplined lives and prevents them from making decisions that are detrimental to their well being. Young adults living with their parents result in stronger family bonds. Family is the building block of the society, it is the very foundation upon which human society is built upon. A healthy and happy family is essential for the well being of the society at large. Young adults should live with their parents until they become mature enough to live responsibly.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'thus', 'well', 'in addition']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.233287858117 0.229887763892 101% => OK
Verbs: 0.156889495225 0.158761421928 99% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0954979536153 0.0866891130778 110% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0668485675307 0.046263068375 144% => OK
Pronouns: 0.075034106412 0.0685040099705 110% => OK
Prepositions: 0.12551159618 0.118717715034 106% => OK
Participles: 0.0341064120055 0.0351676179071 97% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.39227234803 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0286493860846 0.0309702414327 93% => OK
Particles: 0.00818553888131 0.00188951952338 433% => OK
Determiners: 0.06275579809 0.0887237588012 71% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0218281036835 0.0209618222197 104% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0150068212824 0.0139019557991 108% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3951.0 2387.08602151 166% => OK
No of words: 691.0 408.028673835 169% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.71780028944 5.86048508987 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.12707312764 4.48200974243 114% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.31982633864 0.338922669872 94% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.218523878437 0.251872472559 87% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.125904486252 0.174417080927 72% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0723589001447 0.112833075102 64% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39227234803 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 292.0 212.727598566 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.422575976845 0.524397521467 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 52.8278058614 59.2087087015 89% => OK
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6684587814 150% => OK
Sentence length: 22.2903225806 20.5533526081 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.7443170289 48.84282405 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.451612903 120.699889404 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2903225806 20.5533526081 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.258064516129 0.644075263715 40% => More Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.5376344086 132% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.54480286738 216% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 44.1427104243 45.7405998639 97% => OK
Elegance: 1.31506849315 1.45489161554 90% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288774869169 0.300154397459 96% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0950467436556 0.103427244359 92% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.076384033618 0.0752933317313 101% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.467732157934 0.497263757937 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.110534427037 0.151897553556 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113331821495 0.114077575197 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0720236495694 0.0781384742642 92% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.392973643415 0.336927656856 117% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0346089270456 0.067059652881 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204953871027 0.210909579961 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0470154169652 0.0618886996521 76% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8870967742 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.86379928315 233% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.91756272401 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 18.0 8.42114695341 214% => OK
Negative topic words: 8.0 2.4623655914 325% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 28.0 13.6433691756 205% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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