Youth time is that phase of one's life, when an individual goes through lots of physical and social changes, and feel great when he achieve something by doing himself without anyone's support. This sense of independence from their family gives the feeling of greater achievement to some youth. However, I am not in agreement with this motif. I belong to a country where family plays a major role in a person's life and parents are equivalent to the God. My essay will provide reasons for my disagreement with the statement.
First of all, staying with parents makes youth financially strong. The young adults are always in need of money for studies, for transportation or for some other basic necessities. For example, one of my friend when she started her first job, she got the privilege of getting her company location in her hometown itself. So she stayed at her home with her family while working. She was able to save money, which she had to pay if she opted to stay away from her home in an apartment. Gradually, she was able to secure enough money to make down payment of her own house in future. With this, she was able to get other comforts of staying in the home, like home cook food, parental care when she is not well, or other similar advantages.
Secondly, getting proper guidance when in any difficult situation. Always staying with parents does not seize one's independence, at times parents help us in taking the major decision in our life. To illustrate this, I will take my own example. My parent's always taught me, how to take a decision rather than telling me what should I choose out of two options. When I was in my high school, I had to choose one subject out of biology and maths as my major. My father told me to first analyze the positive and negative facet of both the subject and then take one.Thus, I chose biology as my major as I was more inclined towards medical profession.
Finally, as we grow young our parents turn old, by staying together we can take care of each other in good or bad circumstances. For instance, one of my colleague, who was staying with her family one day she got to know that her father has got diabetes. The doctor has advised my friend to change his father's eating habit and lifestyle. She started taking her out for the morning walk and took care of his food. As a result, if few months her father's diabetes level came down under normal range. Thus, as she was staying with her family, was able to take care of her father, else his condition would have been deteriorated without proper care.
To conclude, the reason made in above essays depicts that benefits of staying with parents outweigh the harms of staying with them.
- Modern transportation and shipping has made the world a better place to live. 80
- TOEFL integrated writing: Altruism. 3
- Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? 80
- workweek change 3
- Altruism 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 29, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
Youth time is that phase of ones life, when an individual goes through l...
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Line 1, column 132, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'achieves'.
Suggestion: achieves
... social changes, and feel great when he achieve something by doing himself without anyo...
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Line 1, column 400, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...ry where family plays a major role in a persons life and parents are equivalent to the ...
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Line 3, column 163, Rule ID: BASIC_FUNDAMENTALS[1]
Message: Use simply 'necessities'.
Suggestion: necessities
...s, for transportation or for some other basic necessities. For example, one of my friend when she...
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Line 3, column 570, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...y to make down payment of her own house in future. With this, she was able to get other c...
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Line 5, column 111, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ays staying with parents does not seize ones independence, at times parents help us ...
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Line 5, column 562, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Thus
...t of both the subject and then take one.Thus, I chose biology as my major as I was m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2213.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 482.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59128630705 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68556276237 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40800594318 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529045643154 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 689.4 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.7903905626 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.52 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.28 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.12 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146539664578 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0470021946105 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0545663464607 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0848926749336 0.150856017488 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0405599723087 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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