Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Others prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
We have known for long that parents play a vital role in the life of an individual and so it is good to have them in our lives. However, is it considered right to stay with them our whole life? The given topic is rather open ended and points out to a controversial statement asking whether young adults should be independent or live with their parents. I believe that young adults should move out after an age of twenty one and live their lives independently for the following reasons.
First, as young adults it is necessary to think that it is not right to rely on the wealth of our parents. Our parents have earned money their whole lives and I totally agree that it is their responsibility to get our schooling done. But that doesn't mean we depend on them every time. For instance, I am an individual living in India. In Indian culture, staying with parents is considered morally correct. And such situations give rise to cases when children try to acquire their parent's money and try to dispatch them to old age homes. We are their children but we have no right to snatch away their property. I am witness to many such cases. Hence, I feel that parents should also urge their children to be responsible and earn for themselves once they come to age.
Second, as youngsters we should be pragmatic and know that life will not be the same. In each scenario we should always be able to manage ourselves. If parents try to manage the situations for me will I turn into an independent adult? I think not. Staying separate from parents however would allow an individual to experience the ups and downs of life. Such an environment gives rise to anticipated planning and self management. For instance, suppose I am hungry and am craving for fried chicken. Staying with parents it is obvious that either one of them would make it for me. Problem arises when they are not present. In that case if I am craving for fried chicken I won't be able to have it since I am dependent on my parents. Had I been independent I would be able to satiate my appetite.
Thus, I would like to conclude by saying that independence from parents would make a person much more responsible and managing rather than remaining to be negligent and irresponsible towards real life scenarios.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, second, so, thus, for instance, i feel, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1857.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.56265356265 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5760261784 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.486486486486 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 586.8 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.9212115393 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.28 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.28 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.4 5.45110844103 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 16.0 4.88709677419 327% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212846797053 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0629415301865 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.050594050018 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135010421929 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0615351035216 0.0645574589148 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 11.7677419355 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.87 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.07 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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