Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better?
Today's youth is developing at such a fast pace and with an increase in globalization, people are more acceptable towards moving far from home in search of a better life. However, I believe that a young adult should stay with his family for a longer time as living with them makes him more obedient and respectful which only helps him in his future. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, this newly matured individual has just started working and has gotten the taste of money for the first time. He is more susceptible in making wrong choices. But, if he is to live with his parents who have gone through this period themselves, they can guide him to the correct path before any serious damage is done. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I completed my undergraduate and started a new job away from all my family members in a completely new city. I was lavish with the money and wasn't thinking about my future. Fast forward 2 years later, I still had no savings. This is when my father talked to me and convinced me to open a saving account. Had it not been my father I still would have been in that same spot.
Furthermore, it is because of your family and your parent's sacrifices because of which you are capable of standing on your legs. They invested their whole life and all their money to give you a happy life and the child now must it is now the child's duty to take care of them in the latter part of their life. The person living with family subconsciously becomes a more humble and considerate human being which will only help him in having a successful family of his own in the future. For instance, my cousin moved to the USA to complete his degree and got involved into all sort of bad habits, but, once he got a job called his parents there to live with him things changed for the better. Now, he not only lives with parents but also has a beautiful family of his own and they all live happily.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that an individual should try to live with his family as long as possible. This is because they are the only one who can truly show you the right path and having a happier life with family around is much easier.
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- LOR 50
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 529, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wasn't
...w city. I was lavish with the money and wasnt thinking about my future. Fast forward ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, still, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, sort of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1824.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 418.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.36363636364 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33708916398 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514354066986 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 585.0 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.20013963 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.0 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243114626653 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0654452447653 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0554389280176 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14880287032 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0593069884855 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.01 10.9000537634 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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