Some young children spend a great amount of their time participating in sports. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this.
Even though many people could argue that spend the whole day practicing sport it is a good thing, I believe that everything in life should be balanced, therefore I think that young children should spend time practicing sport but no that much. In the following paragraph, I will explain both advantages and disadvantages.
Firstly, as a general rule, the more sport we practice the healthier are. It is not a secret that principal advantages of spend a lot of time practicing sports are related with our body, from a pure physical point of view and from a psychological perspective as well. The practices of any sport have several benefits like diminish the blood pressure, increase the oxygen in our lungs and brain
Secondly, spend too much time practicing sport has, however some drawbacks such as not having too much time for school, play or to be with our family. Moreover, an excess of physical activity can undermine our health. For example, runners usually are in a very good shape, nonetheless, as they spent too much time running, their bones end up suffering all the consequences.
Finally, despite the numerous advantages and the few disadvantages that an intense sport activity could have, in my opinion young children needs balance in their lives, not only practicing sport but reading, playing and leisure. All these activities allows them to grow and develop as an integral human been.
To conclude, I should say that , as a general rule, spend some time practicing sport is a very good idea because the children will grow up healthier, nevertheless, spending too much time can undermine the time that should be dedicated to other activities, such as read or listen music , moreover, an excess of exercise can be counterproductive for children’s health. Hence, for all the reason mentioned above, I am convinced that children should not spend too much time practicing sports
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, hence, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, i think, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 52.1666666667 48% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1585.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 314.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04777070064 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84456003476 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.53821656051 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 486.0 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 96.1058300964 48.9658058833 196% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.090909091 100.406767564 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5454545455 20.6045352989 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 15.4545454545 5.45110844103 284% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196048556665 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0758310984456 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0555347319463 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117452733764 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0378695979604 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 11.7677419355 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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