Some young people have free time in the evenings after school or on days off from school. Which of the following activities would be most beneficial for young people (age 14-18) to do in their spare time? Why?
Getting practical work experience either at a part time job or by volunteering in the community
Learning to play a sport
Learning to play a musical instrument
It is evident that in this highly sophisticated world, human beings have been struggling to find a way to spend every moment of their life with joy and happiness in order to enjoy their life span. In this regard, all individuals try to find the best way to reach this goal, whether be young or adult. Some people tend to believe that getting some practical works such as a part-time job or learning to play a musical instrument have many advantages to do for young people in their spare time. However, from my perspective, learning to play a sport and doing exercises would be more beneficial for this group of people. In what follows, I will try to provide some cogent reasons to support my opinion.
First and foremost, learning to play a sport and doing it in their leisure time, will help young people to alleviate their tension and pressure which is brought from school time. It goes without saying that, doing sports have various positive impacts on human’s health such as relieving stress and tension coming from stressful task and situations during the day. Moreover, since young people do not have enough time in their school to learn and do sport because of the education system of most of the countries which focus on theoretical courses, learning a sport after school would be a great opportunity to use their free time in the best way. In other words, all students spend about 6 hours a day to learn sophisticated courses such as mathematics, physics, chemists and so on including lots of assignments which cause lots of stress and pressure for students; however, they only spend two hours a week for the sport time in their school. Thus, learning and doing sport after school not only helps them to alleviate their stress but also they can enjoy their free time with numerous profits by doing sport.
Another explanation for my point of view rests on the fact that learning to play a sport in young people’s spare time will develop their social skills. In other words, most of the young people going to the gym or sports club to learn and do sport. This clarified the fact that in these places young individuals have more time to communicate with others having similar interests in one sports subject; however, they do not have this opportunity during their school time. To put it vividly, when young people decide to learn one sport or even doing some exercises in their spare time, by going to the gym can start new friendship for, other who spend their time in that place has a lot in common with each other which not only helps them to find many friends but also they can learn how to communicate with each other, how to interact with each other with respect and dignity. As a result, the more time young people for learning allocate, the more friends and social skills they would gain.
In short, all of the reasons mentioned above lead us to the conclusion that it would be more beneficial for young people to learn a sport and do it. Because they can alleviate their stress and pressure to stay productive all day long and improve their social skills which help them have more friends and strong relationships.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 934, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to allocate'
Suggestion: to allocate
...the more time young people for learning allocate, the more friends and social skills the...
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Line 7, column 11, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ial skills they would gain. In short, all of the reasons mentioned above lead us to the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, so, thus, in short, such as, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 82.0 52.1666666667 157% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2598.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 553.0 407.700716846 136% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69801084991 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84932490483 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38176453595 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.414104882459 0.524837075471 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 754.2 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.1344086022 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 79.732598084 48.9658058833 163% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.823529412 100.406767564 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.5294117647 20.6045352989 158% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.70588235294 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.391495239679 0.236089414692 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.158950957978 0.076458572812 208% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0956918903364 0.0737576698707 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.26252998147 0.150856017488 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0522032171605 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.92 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.0537634409 147% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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