If students had to attend classes for 11 months a year, would they get a better education? People often possess different opinions on this issue. Based on my personal experience, I strongly argue that students would not be able to benefit from spending more time in class.
First, to have an effective education, students should get enough rest. However, receiving classes for 11 months a year can not allow them to do so.Taking my sister for example, last year, she spent a whole year learning programing. Since she didn’t get rest and spend time relaxing, continuing studying for such a long time really stressed her out. Eventually, she didn’t get a satisfying performance. On the other hand, my friend, Jack, also spent a year learning programming last year. Unlike my sister, Jack didn’t study for a whole year. Instead, he went on a trip every three months during the learning period. By doing so, he could release the anxiety gaining from the programming classes. Accordingly, he learned it very well. He even got a job as an engineer.
Secondly, students care about their future careers, but attending classes for almost a year can not provide students extra time to explore their interests. For instance, when I was a college student, I spent every summer and winter vacations being an intern in many companies. In this way, I got the chance to know that I was interested in marketing but not my major, economics. I had taken a lot of courses in marketing since then. Furthermore, I got a job of it after I graduated from university. However, if students have to spend most of their time studying, they will not have enough time to find where their passion is. Ｗhat’s worse, students may spend more time studying the subject they don’t even like. Apparently, students would not get a better education if they were forcing to take courses for 11 months a year.
To sum up, I don’t agree that taking classes for such a long time will make students receive effective education. After all, spending time relaxing and exploring other fields is as important as studying for students.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...nths a year can not allow them to do so.Taking my sister for example, last year, she s...
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...t year, she spent a whole year learning programing. Since she didn’t get rest and spend ti...
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Suggestion: to program; to programme
...riend, Jack, also spent a year learning programming last year. Unlike my sister, Jack didn’...
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... well. He even got a job as an engineer. Secondly, students care about their futu...
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...a better education if they were forcing to take courses for 11 months a year. To sum...
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...s as important as studying for students.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, apparently, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, then, well, after all, for example, for instance, of course, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1763.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 356.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95224719101 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69951127589 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542134831461 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 520.2 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.2468868298 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.1363636364 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1818181818 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.77272727273 5.45110844103 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.33453684754 0.236089414692 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0914624608625 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102100055768 0.0737576698707 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211576462502 0.150856017488 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0715277643964 0.0645574589148 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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