For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children (five to ten years old) than to spend money on universities.
I think children are backbone of evere society and country. So, I believe spending money for children is an essential factor for improving a country because of several reasons. I want to explain my ideas and reasons in the following.
First of all, I think what children learning in her or his childhood is something permanent in his or her mind. Children have no idea about all of the things and we can teach them what we want. If they learn suitabe things, they will use their knowledge in an apropriate way. If we teach good things to them, they will be good man and women. Their beliefs shape in childhood and it matters that we spend time and money because of that. I think spending money in their childhood somehow will improve the condition of the country in future
Also, the time for finding the children taste about different science and career is their childhoos, so it is important they teach different things, and they be familliar with different jobs. For obtaining this purpose spending money is crucial. In universities most of the girls and boys have found their favorites and I think there is no need for spending money so much in comparison with spending money for children. . For example, I have an aunt that she has three children. She cares much about their schools and behavior. My aunt and his husband prepare personal laptops for their children, they baught a lot of books for them, and also they send their children to specific institues for learning about various kinds of scientific methods. Finally, their children absorbed to specific field and now all of them are successful person in their field. They are experts for their country, and they achieve it just because what they learned in their childhood.
In a nutshell, I want to say that children are the future of the society. It matters their beliefs, ideas, manners, and personality for what the society want to be. We have to care about them. We improve our condition by improving our children, by improving the condition of their lives, by providing books and labratory tools for them.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...rison with spending money for children. . For example, I have an aunt that she ha...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...re the future of the society. It matters their beliefs, ideas, manners, and perso...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, if, so, for example, i think, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1716.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 360.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76666666667 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46414734963 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.458333333333 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 501.3 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.229795918 48.9658058833 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.8 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.2 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238680840114 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.088519693232 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0931605302265 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164266756302 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0787157154206 0.0645574589148 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.09 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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