TPO-44 - Independent Writing Task Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing th
Without a shadow of the doubt, children will play a vital role in social developement and improvement. Children are future of everuy country. So, we have to do best things for their good sake. Many people contend that busy parents must spend their leisure time to play games and sports with their children, while others assert taht parets must use their free time to do tasks that related to their children's school. Both of the opposing arguments appear to be somewhat convincing and stand to point. However, my personal experience and actual observation of life have led me to agree that parents must use their leisure time for having fun with their kids. In the ensuing lines, I delve into two reasons to substantiate my point.
The first and possibly the paramount consequential reason is that I believe spending time for having fun with our children is necessary for their spirits. Our children spend most of their time in schools. Also, they have to do their endless homoworks and assignments. Sometimes, these tasks are boring and they need to other kind of activities to obtain energy an good mood to do their works. So, playing with their parents is one of these activities. According to a new article that I read it before, kids that spend their free times with their parents are happier kids in comparison with kids that just focous on their lessons. Also, the researchers have found that spending time with kids for playing had lead to obtaining better grades by these kids. As you can see, playing is important for obtaining better grades. Children that learn their lessons and obtain good scores will make the future.
Another point springing to mind is that parents can play with their chidren and between their plays they can taught a lot of useful things to their children. Today, there are a lot of toys that by using them parents can teach so many things to their kids. For example, recentli I bought a boardgame to my doughter. This gorgeouse game is something that she learns about birds like their migrations, their shape, their size and their types. So, we play and learn. I think it is practical that we spend our time with our children to play and also to do their homeworks. Additionally, during playing they can improve their skills like memorizing, counting, focousing and thinking. As a result playing is not only useful for kids but also increase their abilities.
To sum it all up, by taking all the aforementioned grounds into considaration I believe that parents have to spend their time for playing with their kids. It is essential for kids because playing make children fresh and also they can learn educational things during their plays. I hope someday all the children all ower the world can play in piece.
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- TPO 42 independent writing 3
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 76, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t consequential reason is that I believe spending time for having fun with our ch...
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Line 2, column 363, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...her kind of activities to obtain energy an good mood to do their works. So, playin...
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Line 2, column 710, Rule ID: HAD_VBP[1]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'leaded', 'led'.
Suggestion: leaded; led
...spending time with kids for playing had lead to obtaining better grades by these kid...
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Line 3, column 111, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'teach'
Suggestion: teach
...hidren and between their plays they can taught a lot of useful things to their childre...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, while, for example, i think, kind of, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 78.0 43.0788530466 181% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2272.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 474.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79324894515 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43704766856 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472573839662 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 662.4 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.9699433999 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.1481481481 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5555555556 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.11111111111 5.45110844103 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.39446203928 0.236089414692 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118301255389 0.076458572812 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0927285763795 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.274664154383 0.150856017488 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0755737876108 0.0645574589148 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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