Undoubtedly, traveling to mars has always been a controversial topic among scientists. More specifically the writer puts forth on the idea that its impossible for humans to visit the mars. However the professor points out that there are some serious flaws in the writer's claim. To be exact the professor believes that although there are lots of problems in traveling to Mars, it's not impossible to do so. She more or less addresses the problem with each point made in the reading.
First of all, the writer claims that a round-trip to Mars and back is likely to take at least two years. He believes humans can't take enough supplies of food, water, and oxygen with them due to limited cargo capacity of the spaceship. But the professor refutes with this point and says that astronauts can grow hydro panic plants in the spaceship to supply food. Hydro panic plants also help with refreshing the air. She goes on and says space crew can recycle used water for watering the plants and their personal use.
secondly, the reading states that since spending a long time in the zero-gravity environment has negative effects on the human body, astronauts can't survive 2 years of living in space. The professor, not surprisingly though, believes that there are other astronauts in the national space station and other places who spent month in zero gravity. She goes on and says that astronauts can use some technical methods, do regular exercises and eat vitamins in order to stay healthy.
Finally, the author wraps up the topic by claiming that astronauts on a mission to Mars would be exposed to dangerous levels of space radiation, and constructing a shield that would protect the whole spaceship from space radiation is at present impossible because it would add too much weight to the ship. The again professor stays on the other side of the argument and says that space radiation is not everywhere on their way to mars. There can be a radiation detector and a small shielded area on the ship, when detector detects a radiation, astronauts would go to shielded area until they pass the radiations.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 27, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'mar'.
Suggestion: mar
Undoubtedly, traveling to mars has always been a controversial topic a...
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Line 1, column 190, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...mpossible for humans to visit the mars. However the professor points out that there are...
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Line 3, column 125, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... at least two years. He believes humans cant take enough supplies of food, water, an...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Secondly
... the plants and their personal use. secondly, the reading states that since spending...
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Line 5, column 145, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...e effects on the human body, astronauts cant survive 2 years of living in space. The...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, at least, first of all, more or less
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1748.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 359.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86908077994 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56211693108 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548746518106 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 527.4 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.7573990221 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.25 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4375 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.125 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 11.8709677419 8% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0949643740487 0.236089414692 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0315456571173 0.076458572812 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0251218842555 0.0737576698707 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0562680064874 0.150856017488 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0378241106057 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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