T P O 34-2
Our life has been reshaped by technology in more than one ways.As reasult a new style of life have been prevalent among people specially among millennials generation. Although, some people claims that thanks to technology upbringing children is easier that past, I strongly believe that nowadays, family have to put lots of effort to positively educate their children for a couple of reason which will be explained in the following.
Firstly, children easily have access to an array of information which have been introduced in the internet or social networks. Furthermore, these information is based on different ideas or beliefs which children can be easily effected by them. For example, devilish or infidel groups have promulgated their beliefs to engross children in their groups. Further example is associated with porno websites or online violent games which without any restriction have introduced their contents on the net. As a result this Captivating information can have negative effect on children personality growth or even can cause personality deficiency among them.
Secondly, spending much time on the social networks or games may increase the performance of children on their education. On the one hand, chastising or admonishing children can have negative effects on them such as anxiety or depression. Therefore, parents need new methods of training to hopefully persuade their children to spend less time on the social networks or online games and grab children’s attention to education. For example, the statistics in Iran shows that the education efficiency of children due to much spending time on the net can be increased till 50% of real performance.
Admittedly, technology provides parents with a dozens of facilities to educate their children and improve personality growth among them such as educational films or games. Nevertheless, parents have to restrict their children from the harmful information in the net and after that they have to learn new technology to eliminate gapes between themselves. As a result, parents have more challenge for an appropriate training for their children.
To conclude, though, parents can use technology to train their children efficiently, it seems that in new millennials, upbringing children is more difficult than past.
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- For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children (five to ten years old) than to spend money on universities. 66
- Essay topics: TPO-52. Integrated Writing Task. Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they challenge the specific points made in the reading passage. 3
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 55, Rule ID: ONE_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use the numeral 'one' with plural words. Did you mean 'one way', 'a way', or simply 'ways'?
Suggestion: one way; a way; ways
...een reshaped by technology in more than one ways.As reasult a new style of life have bee...
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Line 1, column 64, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: As
...ped by technology in more than one ways.As reasult a new style of life have been p...
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Line 1, column 64, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ped by technology in more than one ways.As reasult a new style of life have been p...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ch will be explained in the following. Firstly, children easily have access to ...
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Line 2, column 143, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'these informations'?
Suggestion: this information; these informations
...ternet or social networks. Furthermore, these information is based on different ideas or beliefs ...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...use personality deficiency among them. Secondly, spending much time on the soci...
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Line 3, column 523, Rule ID: TO_TOO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
...he education efficiency of children due to much spending time on the net can be in...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ncreased till 50% of real performance. Admittedly, technology provides parents ...
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Line 4, column 49, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a dozen' or simply 'dozens'?
Suggestion: a dozen; dozens
...tedly, technology provides parents with a dozens of facilities to educate their children...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...propriate training for their children. To conclude, though, parents can use tec...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1946.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 356.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.46629213483 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95739429866 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51404494382 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 603.0 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.0574210653 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.733333333 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7333333333 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.86666666667 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 11.7677419355 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 58.1214874552 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 10.9000537634 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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