Task 1: Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their family for a longer time. Which of these solutions do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your o

In today's societies, parents have a difficult task educating and managing their young adults. Besides young adults being influenced and attracted by the world, and the opportunities they think might have living alone, it is an age where young adults avert parents. This is an interesting topic that will be reflected differently for each person and the concept of each one will be based on factors such as social, economic and even familiar background. Although, it sounds appealing to live alone, when it comes to me I consider that teenagers should stay with their parents, for some reasons.

To begin with, young adults are not financially prepared to face responsibilities. Young adults rely on their parents to cover their expenses. Therefore, this is the age that teenagers are attending to school. For instance, if teenagers for any reason decide to abandon their parent's home, they will neglect school. To illustrate that, I will refer to my brother Ramon. When my brother decided to move to another city, far of my parents, my brother didn't realize that he would have to pay his own bills. In fact, my brother leave the school and started working fulltime, just to cover his basic needs. At the end, my brother returned with my mom because he thought and arrived to the conclusion that if he works he cannot study.

Another noteworthy aspect that I should mention is that young adults are not mentally develop to distinguish between bad and good friends who might encourage young to take part in bad activities. At this age, teenagers think that everyone is his or her friend. Indeed, scientists are concurred that, teenagers' brain is not totally develop until the age of 21 years. Therefore, teenagers need their parents closed to them, because parents advised them.

Finally, to live with one parents doesn't mean that one is not independent. Although, if one lives with parents one has to follow certain rules, nevertheless, it is wealthy due to the fact that one might save and help parents to pay bills as well. To be more specific, when my sister got her first job she still lived with my parents. Notwithstanding, my sister helped my parents with the rent and other bills.

To sum up, for the reasons stated above, I outright consider that young adults should live with their parents because they are not economic, and mentally prepare to face responsibilities, and lastly one might have a better performance in the school.

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