It is hard to deny that technology provides much convenience in searching for information, which leads impressionable people to generate the view that technology promotes children's creativity. However, such a statement suffers from logical and factual fallacies, and it should be examined meticulously. As far as efficiency, interpersonal relationship, and dependence are concerned, I firmly hold that the rapidly developing technology has weakened children's creativity.
First and foremost, while children are immersed in technology's joy, their efficiency is lower, as many different kinds of information received from technological products will divert their attention away. Meanwhile, every app on the phone wants to send users notifications. It will be great if they all have something useful to share, improving working efficiency. Unfortunately, most of them do not convey practical information but only contribute to making people tap icons with red dots all day long like a digital version of whack-a-mole to eliminate all the notifications. Not to mention that although these technologies make users feel good for a moment, they will finally become anxious, cause cravings, and even end in withdrawal from their current tasks soon afterward. Suppose that people check their smartphones so many times per day, it is hard to be efficient in creative work when they need to stop to look at their phone every a few minutes.
Furthermore, children have substituted technology for relationships and real conversations, indicating that technology slows their creative development speed. Take the case of Yu Hua, who is a famous Chinese writer that created many novels with a graphic description of a past era about thirty years ago. Once in an interview, he pointed out that his novels can be mirrors of the historical period because he spent much time interacting face-to-face with different people active in the past ages playing different roles in society before creating his novels. Had it not been for Yu Hua having conversations with those people to stimulate writing inspiration, he would never create excellent novels that reflect history to help readers understand past events.
Nevertheless, a voice arises that technology makes it easy to find a solution to many problems, reducing the degree of difficulty in creativity. Ironically, the convenience of technology has allowed children to solve previously insurmountable problems at a fundamental level. This smart technology has made people lose independent thinking because they are now highly dependent on it for even the most basic things. The more people hand over to machines what makes them unique as humans(their ability to think, process, and make decisions), the less we stretch and grow our capacity to do those things. Therefore, children's dependence on technology obstructs their creativity.
In a nutshell, I maintain that technology limits children's creative potential. Admittedly, as my favorite quote from Penelope Fitzgerald goes, it is interesting to note that everyone has a different take on the world, a different opinion, and given the same inputs have completely different outputs, and some people may oppose me. However, I believe they will compromise after being exposed to my article.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 20, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...drens creativity. First and foremost, while children are immersed in technolog...
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Line 3, column 100, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...ogys joy, their efficiency is lower, as many different kinds of information received from tech...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2781.0 1977.66487455 141% => OK
No of words: 505.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.50693069307 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74048574033 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11808320892 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 305.0 212.727598566 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.60396039604 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 878.4 618.680645161 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.891334479 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.428571429 100.406767564 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0476190476 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.38095238095 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245376843745 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0751415535917 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0633733340165 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129338303702 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0283226538317 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 11.7677419355 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 10.9000537634 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.39 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 146.0 86.8835125448 168% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 20, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...drens creativity. First and foremost, while children are immersed in technolog...
^^
Line 3, column 100, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...ogys joy, their efficiency is lower, as many different kinds of information received from tech...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2781.0 1977.66487455 141% => OK
No of words: 505.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.50693069307 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74048574033 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11808320892 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 305.0 212.727598566 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.60396039604 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 878.4 618.680645161 142% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.891334479 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.428571429 100.406767564 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0476190476 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.38095238095 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245376843745 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0751415535917 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0633733340165 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129338303702 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0283226538317 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 11.7677419355 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 10.9000537634 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.39 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 146.0 86.8835125448 168% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.