It is general truth that students’ education does not only consist sport and social activities or only classes and libraries. It is a must for them to develop social and sport skills as well as to gain knowledge from books. A simple recognition of the argument lends our discussion to the question of do sport and social activities are more important than classes and libraries for students in their lives or they are equal. Actually, people’s attitudes toward this subject are widely varied from person to person. Although some people adhere to this belief that more knowledge you gain from books and classes, better job you can get, easier life it will be for you, whereas other have opposite point of view, believing that we need not only professors and scientists; singers and champions are not less important for society and even for countries’ future generation. As far as I’m concerned, I contend that supporting financially social and sport activities just like classes and libraries is more important than to choose between them which has more priority because of the following reasons that I will discuss them.
The main reason for my propensity is that decisions, such as choosing a future career, gaining important knowledge, time spending in the gym or in the library are up to students. Universities and colleges only can help students to be the best in their chosen directions. Furthermore, universities should not decide for students where to work or what to do with their lives. By supporting with money the field, what is more preferred for universities, we can lose talented people. Take myself as an example. I used to study a lot in university. At the beginning of my term, I was alone and it was hard to meet someone although there were many students. My university had a good sport equipment and many social activities, so I walked into the sport club, asking to join classes. After couple of days in the sport club, I gained many new friends and got a part-time job as a gym trainer. Now I cannot imagine my life without gym. Sport helps me to reduce stress what I received during hard working or studying days. Social cycles what I gained in the gym help me to develop myself and to be updated about news. Classes gave me a lot of knowledge, which provide me a good place of work. In contrast, sport gave me good contacts and friends who offer me a job and made me not only strong but persistent person.
The second reason why I agree with it is that, undoubtedly, the places provided for sports and social activities are in need of money. It is common that the school will spend a large sum of money to purchase updated books and facilities to fulfill the requirements of classes and libraries. However, finding a suitable place to play sports or hold social activities is always hard. For instance, one of my friends, who is a professional basketball player, if he wants to read a book, he can easily find a seat in the library, but if he wants to run for half an hour, the crowded gym will just turn him into an upset mood. Then, requiring the same amount of financial support to ameliorate the condition is just reasonable.
On the whole, according to the above-mentioned points and details, it is crystal-clear that financial support should be contributed to sports and social activities just like classes and libraries, for they help with strengthening bodies, making progress in communication skills and they are in shortage of fund.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 260, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to field'
Suggestion: to field
...students to be the best in their chosen field. Furthermore, universities should not ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, furthermore, however, if, second, so, then, well, whereas, as to, for instance, in contrast, in short, such as, as well as, on the whole, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 33.0 13.8261648746 239% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2890.0 1977.66487455 146% => OK
No of words: 602.0 407.700716846 148% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80066445183 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.95335121839 4.48103885553 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76372225933 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 298.0 212.727598566 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495016611296 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 885.6 618.680645161 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 79.3130640574 48.9658058833 162% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.153846154 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1538461538 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.34615384615 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23567403534 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0626809807358 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0570208103249 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148369251391 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0319418096138 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 86.8835125448 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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